Rather than reviving my years old thread about everything I do and have confusion about the OP, i'mma just put thum heeyr.
Writers' Workshop is a class you take; it's really just discussions, prompts about writing, and sharing it with the class. So, now we're getting into BeatNick Cafe and have to write poems. In the class we only get like 1 or 2 comments on each of our poems; I'm greedy for feedback. :b
Let us go then, You and I. (prompt)
Let us go then, you and I. Walking along the soft hills; the large green plains seeing the sun quietly die. Our subliminal path gives way to change as the sky gently opens her other eye. __________
Steal a line from the poem (on the screen) (prompt)
Positive The heuristic hedonism is: We know not whether it's mine or his. Our dreams of a life together, were vexed to nightmare by a rocking cradle. __________
Heuristic means to stimulate interest in learning.
Here's one that blurted out after Beatniks.
Words Words..... You crave the empirical thoughts, The tyrannical narcissism of communication. Praising poems, lord messiah, Those bastards dare defy logical emotion.
Words... I want I see I am I need I want more, give me more. I'm heard yet I cannot listen. I'm shown while I cannot see.
I'm mad at others, I point the blame. My hypocrisy, the shame. Don't discriminate, hate, hurt You don't realize you're doing it now.. Listening. Waiting.
Words..
You don't know nothing. - Redneck. Yo, what the (*eff) you know? - (*N-word). The lord has answers. - Clergyman You, Me, Us, We, Hypocrites.
You have it all when you got nothin More is not the golden fleece rather the knife you run on your wrist let it rain blood.
You have it all when you got nothin! Let meaningless puffs of air rasp around you. Whispering, Suggesting Twisting tighter at your throat.
Words!
Is this too long, lost in thought? Good. Daydream. When I know you're away the suffocating apathy lessons.
You point your fingers at the empty slate using your eyes to paint all you hate Do you know what I see? I see me.
