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MoonFairy
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Shepherd

It's nothing special. I'm just a bit on the sad side and I felt the urge to write this down.



You had me once
And then you secretly let go
I still held on
How was I supposed to know?

I used to think it was love,
But now I can see.
That love you had,
Was never meant for me.

You were my other half,
You held my heart.
Now it is in peices,
Because you tore it apart.

You tried to claim your life,
And point to me for the blame.
And I actually felt bad,
I didn't know it was part of you sick, cruel game.

You came around again,
With your same charm and wit.
I still felt love for you,
Even though I would never admit.

You repaired my heart,
After you broke it.
Should of seen it coming,
The second crime that you would commit.

I fell for it again.
You think I would of learned.
You didn't change a single thing.
Ever since you returned.

So you obliterated my heart.
You killed me twice.
Should of known.
That your love came with a price.

I would blame you again,
But I was the idiot here.
Should of never let you back in,
Should of never held you so dear.

Fool me once,
Shame on you.
Fool me twice,
Shame on me.

Truer words have never been spoken.

I guess I should thank you
For teaching me a lesson
Everything that you put me through
Left me in a depression.

During that time,
I learned so much.
You taught me,
To not use love for a crutch.



Bleh. I would add on, but I don't think you guys really wanna read a huge poem. Yeah. So. There.

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ShadowNekoAngel
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Awwe..
I like's it. :3

manny6574
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Nomad

Should of


Should've, it's an abbreviation of should have.
EnterOrion
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Should've, it's an abbreviation of should have.


http://www.omgmod.org/wiki/images/5/51/Nazi.jpg

Anyways, nice poem. The rhythm feels a bit off, but nonetheless, good. I'm not much into love poems, I prefer my own realm of death and destruction though.

But it is still quite good.
manny6574
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You know why I can never make that mistake? Cos I'm not english, or american, I'm polish so I learnt english, though in england with the correct grammar so on. I only found out that many people make that error last year after being in england for just over 5 years

wajor59
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I like this poem, it's good because you've learned from a mistake. We all make them it's the "What are going to do about it" part that interests me more than what was done. You see what I mean?
I am no poet and I occasionally post one on WAM, I know its Art,Music and Writing but there's more writing on this forum from what I've seen so far. Then, there' more art and I haven't seen any music, is it buried?

Speaking of music:
You could easily come up with a song from this poem. I hear a meter when I read it but I favor more gutsy, "I'm out'a here" type of poems and songs when the guy's been a two timer. I guess that's why I like Miranda Lambert?

Nurvana
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Farmer

Lol I did that to a chick once. But she was a bitch.

MoonFairy
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Shepherd

ty for the input people
And Mistah Grammar Nazi, SHOVE IT WHERE THE SUN DON'T SHINE. lol jk. XD

The second crime that you would commit.

TYPO! This should be
The second crime you would commit.
No "That" should be in it. I think it makes it flow just a wee bit better.
manny6574
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And Mistah Grammar Nazi, SHOVE IT WHERE THE SUN DON'T SHINE


Shut up! Just trying to help, and I still don't get how you can make that error.
Holden012
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We know you were trying to help , Great poem by the way. A bit of a poet , eh?

SirLegendary
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Duke

Wow I love it! it's great!!

MoonFairy
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Shepherd

Shut up! Just trying to help, and I still don't get how you can make that error

I SAID LOL JK!!!! that pardons any rudeness i said before it. XP
A bit of a poet , eh?

nah man, I dont write poetry. ever. i hate it with all of my being. XD idk why i am so sarcastic today. must be a good mood
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