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ramzaman
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okayy..i write songs but i really like this one..i play guitar and i havent added music to it yet..heres the lyrics..tell me what you think

She Says- By: Cody Sykes (me)

she says..she hates evverryything
i say..you should be happy
she says..she isnt happy
i said..she has no reason to be saaaddd

you say..your life couldnt get worse
i say..it couldnt get better
you say..no on cares about you
but you dont know what i go through
for yooouuu

you say everyone hates you
but you dont know
everyone loves you like i dooo

she says things are starting to go right
she says..shes starting to cheer up
i said..i knew it all would
she said..shed never give uuuppp

you say..your life couldnt get worse
i say..it couldnt get better
you say..no on cares about you
but you dont know what i go through
for yooouuu
you say everyone hates you
but you dont know
everyone loves you like i dooo

she said..shes glad she kept going
I said..she made the right choice
She said..she was so happy
I said..i knew she wouuuullddd

She says..shes loved by everyone
I said..i couldnât love her more
She says..she is so happy
I saidâ¦â¦â¦its about time

Thank you for reading and telling me if you like it..so far everyone ive showed liked it..you can make the singing sound however you like although i know how its supposed to be sung..it sounds much better when i sing it than when its written but..oh well..hahah ((=

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2014631
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Nomad

Ohhh. Well why didn't you say that? The entire song makes her sound like a selfish, crazy woman that thinks the whole world's out to get her.

Google567
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Farmer

Hey, you should put that in your song, lol XD

ramzaman
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Ohhh. Well why didn't you say that? The entire song makes her sound like a selfish, crazy woman that thinks the whole world's out to get her.


well..shes not a crazy psycopath..she actually has a reason to feel hated..which sadly..she is by alot of people..and she isnt selfish..she trys her best to please some of the losers at my school..it never works
Google567
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Farmer

Sounds like she'd Do anything to be cool in the crowd.

ramzaman
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Farmer

yeah..or anything to be loved..her parents are either drunk of at work..she has no attention from them..her dad works 2 jobs..one all day and one most of the night..and her mom is in the hospital becasue of smoking

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Nomad

I think if you're actually making this for someone, presumably to sing to them, you should do it more like this.

ramzaman
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Farmer

yeah..ive got some of the music done

Google567
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Farmer

Give us a peak on youtube.

ramzaman
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i cant..my computer had a virus and i got rid of it but it messed up google..i cant get on youtube because it uses google.. =/

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In reply to Nemo's post on the first page:

Love, love me do.
You know I love you,
I'll always be true,
So please, love me do.
Whoa ccc, love me do.

Love, love me do.
You know I love you,
I'll always be true,
So please, love me do.
Whoa, love me do.


Does that look familiar? It's from one of their first songs: Love Me Do. Yes, I believe this counts since it's a Lennon/McCartney song, but the point I was making was that their first album was entirely pop love songs with little content, written and recorded in the space of, like, two weeks. It was their following album which they really started putting songwriting effort into.

I rest my case
ramzaman
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Farmer

okayy...what are you talking about??

Google567
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Farmer

Thats sad only Strop and I know what hes talking about.

ramzaman
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Farmer

ahahahah..okayy (=

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