I am the mountain,the solid rock, the earth; I am impenetrable, a fortress; a god, I am blank, unemotional,my will implacable. no sight nor touch nor memory;I am alone.
am now peaceful as i lay dying, the lover long dead; knowing i soon follow, staring at the long part between birth and death I impart to you,dear human:contentment is the greatest thing to achieve.
needs improvement? i made it up yesterday. took me thirty seconds to think then type it up.(not bragging i timed it)
Nice poem, but you missed a few spaces in the second paragraph, and at the
clichÃcd
bit, i'd just replace it with a proper word. Also put in all the punctuations it may take some time but it makes it look nice and neat. Other than that well done, I quite like poetry but mine is pretty moderate.