okayy..here is my newest song..ive been going through a tough time..and i express myself by writing..tell me watcha think.. and i dont have a name yet..anyone got any ideas??
Have you ever been in love have you ever needed someone have you ever told yourself you cant breathe when your wit em' and when your together you get this strange happy feelin and this could be it they could be the one
(prechorus) You gave me somthing to live for and after all weve been through and now that your gone i just feel so alone
(chorus) But baby dont worry no more im just happy to see you happy nahh..i aint mad, just sad but baby ill be okay i want you to know one thing though I Love You
I still remember when you said wed be forever i still remember when you said youd love me always you say you still love me, you say you still care then why throw away what we had for my own good? nahh...you crazy baby
You gave me somthing to live for and after all weve been through and now that your gone i just feel so alone
But baby dont worry no more im just happy to see you happy nahh..i aint mad, just sad but baby ill be okay i want you to know one thing though I Love You
now baby..id trade the world just to be with you baby..id trade my life to see you happy i fuckin need you baby..please dont leave me......
You gave me somthing to live for and after all weve been through and now that your gone i just feel so alone
But baby dont worry no more im just happy to see you happy nahh..i aint mad, just sad but baby ill be okay i want you to know one thing though I Love You
its hard to be 100% original..think of how many songs are already out so..you write a song and tell me its easy to not take at least 1 idea from someone else..i try and uhh..this is 100% true by the way..so uhh...fuck off if your gonna be negative
its hard to be 100% original..think of how many songs are already out so..you write a song and tell me its easy to not take at least 1 idea from someone else..i try and uhh..this is 100% true by the way..so uhh...**** off if your gonna be negative
No offense dude... but it was not original... at all. I am certainly not saying that I could write an original song... but... almost all the songs out these days are about... what you just wrote.
almost all the songs out these days are about... what you just wrote.
i know,,,like i said..i write to express myself..so..not everything is original..actually not much is original since most songs have somthing to do with brokenheart or happily in love. hah..its just somthing i during class in school. But....i know..its actually very hard to make an original song
While the previous comment where nothing but spam anyway, it would be nice if you didn't tell people such things. Either embrace the comment as a critique, however useless it might be, or ignore it. Taking it personally is not going to go well on the internet.
I do agree with the previous statements. It seems a little too cliche to be of any interest, a bit like when rappers sing about their love (emphasized by the "babe/baby", as well as the cutting off Gs). Some actual help would be writing out the words properly, which would give the text more of a serious feel as well as possibly cutting out all the "baby"-ing. It does also seem a bit superficial to me, without depth. Adding deeper emotion would possibly give it a more original feel as well.
I do agree with the previous statements. It seems a little too cliche to be of any interest, a bit like when rappers sing about their love (emphasized by the "babe/baby", as well as the cutting off Gs). Some actual help would be writing out the words properly, which would give the text more of a serious feel as well as possibly cutting out all the "baby"-ing. It does also seem a bit superficial to me, without depth. Adding deeper emotion would possibly give it a more original feel as well.
thank you...yeahh i kno..i get my inspiration from rappers..and i dont even like rap..i like some rap..but mostly rock..but ive noticed writing a good rock song is quite hard..rap is much more simple and since i do this in class and i do write it about mylife..it isnt very good
It is decent, but as mentioned, a bit cliche. I have seen worse, and I don't think you should stop just because you get a bit of negative feedback (after all, negative feedback is often better than positive feedback when it comes to improving). If you want to practice, I can recommend finding a rock song you enjoy, and then write lyrics for that. Not only will you have music to show the rhythm and flow of the text, you will also have to think outside of rapping and into other genres.
i wont qquit over this...ive posted 4 songs..none have gotten very good reviews...i mean..ill admit i dnt think im that good..other people say im good..unoriginal yes..but not bad..but i can put music to it..i play guitar, drums,bass,i sing,i can play piano,and i play violen a little...so i wont give up on this..besides..eventually ill write a good song..right?
so i wont give up on this..besides..eventually ill write a good song..right?
That's the spirit. Keep writing!
(Deep down in a dark corner of a dank drawer in the dormant dungeons of my previous domicile... there's a pile of old stuff that I wrote. It is horrible. If I had the guts I might post some of it somewhere. But this is supposed to be reassuring you that yes, you will improve!)
hahah i will...i actually have about 200 songs in my drawer..but i only got a few good ones...some i dont post cause of explicit language...and some just suck..hahah.. you should post some of your stuff..id like to read it
[quote]you cant breathe when your wit em' and when your together you get this strange happy feelin [quote] That sounds a lot like a verse from Eminem's "Love the Way You Lie".
Who cares if its an overused topic for songs, it sounds great. The lyrics are deep and emotional. I just want to know, what genre is it, if it was made into a song, Metal, Rock, R&B etc?
You ever love somebody so much you can barely breathe When you're with 'em You meet and neither one of you even know what hit 'em Got that warm fuzzy feeling Yeah, them those chills you used to get 'em Now you're getting ****** sick of looking at him You swore you'd never hit him; never do nothing to hurt him Now you're in each other's face spewing venom in your words when you spit them You push pull each other's hair, scratch claw hit him Throw him down pin him So lost in the moments when you're in them It's a race that's the culprit controls your boat So they say you're best to go your separate ways Guess if they don't know you cus today that was yesterday Yesterday is over it's a different day Sound like broken records playing over but you promised her Next time you show restraint You don't get another chance Life is no Nintendo game But you lied again Now you get to watch her leave out the window I guess that's why they call it window pane
