hey was up? I made a new song for my band-'Slayers playground' and i want to know your views on it. i am a new song writer so cut me some slack. Will i ever know? Scorching heat thrown at me will i collapse or grow weak? And i see death and pain Oh will i know?
chorus that stole me in the heat As i tried to stay awake are the fangs dull? Will i ever know? Will i ever know?
Blind men rot inside their cage til they dig thier own grave and i see death and pain What am i to gain? Oh, Oh. And will i ever know?
I'm not too experienced of a poet but I have some advice. you don't have to rhyme the whole song but if you want to put emphasis on something to make it stand out it helps to have just that part rhyme because the juxtaposition of rhyme and non-rhyme will make the rhyming part seem even catchier and fluent. Its pretty good but just remember that it all sounds better in your head so take that into consideration.
Theter Puppets dance their play a storm of guilt sends me away I thoght i would have fun oh what am i to gain Suffering and dismay Chorus twice kind of soft a bus of many roads a dial on a cell phone A small crowd that is sad Because of a friendship i never had
