It was a normal Wednesday when it happened. I can't realy explane what "it" was but, ill tell what i remember. Well like i said it was Wednesday and like i do every morning i woke up and walked to the bathroom, then i went to my laptop. I logged on to Armor Games and checked my email. Only one new one. It was from Armor Games. Hmmi thought.Probly just a merit or comment. I opened it and it read:Congrats, you have been chosen to enter Armor Games V.4.Wow, I thought. a new one already? AG3 came out barly a month ago.I pressed the link that said:Click here to enter.All the windows closed. A small mesage came up that said:Hold Still.My laptops built in webcam came on. I felt a strange tingling sensation on my face, then there was nothing. Just darkness and pain.
Please tell me what you think. Yes there will be more chapters.
O_O I think you're over stepping it a little, bud. AG4? Oh heavens!
But yes, I agree with Moon there. More descriptions as to what happened as well as a background to the story and concept in itself makes for a better Chapter 1. This seems more of a...preface to the story.
You remember Beta, right? That's about the right amount of detail that a chapter should have. Real stories have more, but that's pretty good for Armor Games standards lol.
The story's concept is very interesting! I'll be poking here now and then to see how this one goes...You have my interests peaked, good sir :>
I hit the ground hard. Wich ment more pain. What seemed like hours later i got the energy to sit up. I emeditly turned and trew up. As i was vomiting my brains out i noticed a light in the distence. I stood up and stumbled to the light. It was completly dark. The only light was from the moon and stars. I soon passed out after pukeing again.
Some Hours Later...
I heard weels, it felt like i was bounceing around in a wooden cart. Thats probly because i was! Several minuts later the cart stoped. "Sir," said a quiet raspy voice that made me want to shudder. "I've found another one." "Ah yes," said a deep voice."Wake him." I felt something small and round like a pill get forced down my throte. Warmth spred through my body, the pain dissapered and so did the confusion and nasia.I sat up. A HUGE castle loomed before me. It had a moat and drawbrige in the moat were huge paranas. "Well, whats your username?"asked the man in full battle armor."UnlimitedDragon." I replied. He checked a long scroll. "Yes, we've been expecting you." The drawbridge lowered and we entered the castle.
If ud like to be in a next chapter please post on my profile.Thanks.
Please, for the love of something, work on spelling. Not in a bad way, it is just I get frustrated seein minuts, and stuff like that. It would be cool if I could be in it 8D Oh wait, this is supposed to be on your profile.
We crossed the drawbridge and entered the castle. We were in a big hallway with swords and AG sheilds on the walls. There were a number of door ways all the way down. "Do you have any idea where we'er at?" I asked. "Yes I do." he replied. "Does any else know?" "Just the Administrators, and we're not telling anyone." "Well, Anyway," he started saying. "I'm -" He never got to tell me who he was because at that moment an arrow flew through the almost closed drawbridge and hit him in the forehead. His eyes widened, he colapsed. Google567 and cormyn had just came out of a door and saw everything. They rushed over. "Daniel!" cormyn gasped. I realized with a start that that man had been Daniel McNeely, the man who had created Armor Games.
About Five Minutes Later...
Soon a small crowd began to form around the body. I only reconized two people: Pazx and MoonFairy. I heard Google567 mutter to cormyn. "We better take care of the body before we have half the castle to deal with!" "Yes." He agreed. He clapped his hands twice. With a puff of smoke a short thin man with a hunched back appered."Jurusala89 please take this body and arrange a funeral for tomorow at noon." cormyn said. "Yes master cormyn." It was the same quiet raspy voice i heard when i was passed out in the cart.Jurusala89 reached down to telaport them away. "Stop." i said sudenly. I reached down and looked at the arrow. There was a piece of parchment tied to it with a string. I pulled it off. "Read it out loud." Pazx said. "A gift from your dear friends from Kongregate." I read.
Thanks for reading my story so far. I realy need people to be in the story please post here or on my profile if you want to be.Thanks.
It's a pretty unique story so far. I would like to see more detail, and could you make a new paragraph every time someone speaks? That would make it a bit easier to read.
if you want to be in the story any further please fill out this car. sheet
Username: Gender:M or F Age:10-50 Class:See below Profenson:i deside Perk: gos with profesion
Swordman- your average guy with a sword and sheild promotes to Knight Mage- use a staff to preform magic promotes to Wizard-Witch Archer- uses a bow promotes to Marksmen
profensons
Trainer:traines new people:has more experince and does more damage Soldier:normal guy: has more defence Macanic:makes all sorts of things like bombs catapults, weapons, and even robots:has a robot companion can his/her own weapon
