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rockynick
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I've got three white lions on my chest now it's time to be the best loinel messi is wearing a pink dressi while jhon terry is playing footy like katy perry.

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iMogwai
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Maybe you should make it a bit longer before you start a thread about it. Oh, and maybe use some commas too.

wolf1991
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I despise your forced rhymes; and while I won't be technical (rappers hardly seem to breathe when rapping anyway) I would have liked this to make some sense. Because honestly I have no idea what it's about.

iMogwai
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Because honestly I have no idea what it's about.


Well, the "John Terry is playing footy like Katy Perry" part makes me think this is about football (soccer for you americans), and from that, I can only assume that Lionel Messi is a football player too. And, if he was saying bad stuff about some football players, then I can only assume the rest is about football too. The "three white lions on my chest" might refer to the logo of some football team, most likely one the aforementioned players does not play in.

Then again, I could be wrong. I don't even like football.
Reton8
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Or is it like footsies when you rub your foot on someone else's? But it had to be changed to footy to ryhme with Perry? or is it like footbag (Known by the brand name hacky sack)?

SheWhoMustNotBeNamed
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Yes Lionel Messi is a football player, for Barcelona and Argentina. The three white lions I think refers to England. John Terry plays for Chelsea and England.

DeadlyVelociraptor
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Yeah you might wanna a try a bit of dem rhymes
It goes all fuzzy on your tongue like tryin' t'eat a lime
Yeah, maybe you should actually try more of them line breaks
And try to correct your grammar and spelling, for god's sakes
Elaborate scheming is what'cha need for true lyrics
Yeas that is why I came to fix this
Try to write the whole poem/ rap or whatever
Before ya' press the submit, before you pull the lever
Oh try to find the point, try to find the meaning
before you start writing, rhyming... Before you start singing
Oh take ma' advice, I kinda' know what you're talkin' about
Yeah I can transform your rap to flourishing rain from drought...

DV is here, to help once again...

rockynick
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[My rap isn't very good is it]

DeadlyVelociraptor
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Nomad

Neither are your poems, but that is only because you never actually POST THE WHOLE THING

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