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urbanwolf232
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Peasant

Run chicken run.
The farmers got the gun
The wife has the oven hot
And your the one.
So run and run
So you dont get served with a bun.

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phsycomonkey
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Nomad

Three threads of this... Not cool Bro.

iMogwai
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Peasant

Three threads of this... Not cool Bro.


I can only see one.

Anyways, it was kind of funny, but since when does chicken get served with a bun? And why does the third and fourth lines not rhyme, when the others do?
iMogwai
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Sorry for the double post, but I can see the other two threads now. For some reason, they did not show up before, these forums have been very glitchy for me since last night, and if they are for him too, chances are he didn't see them appear and thus tried again, and eventually, when they finally did appear, all of them did.

DeadlyVelociraptor
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Nomad

A little off rhythm... I like the repetition but you should try adding some alliteration/ assonance....

urbanwolf232
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ok thanx guys. il try to make it longer and better,and sorry about the 3 threads

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