First thing first: You seem to link to something that we would not be able to see unless we are logged in. This does not really make it the proper way of publishing stories. Copypaste it into notepad or scren capture what you have made and use that instead. Second: Try looking up our guide to bbcode in the newcomer's section, that should explain a few things.
Now, if you mean to start a thread with a story, it is often better to actually... start the thread with the story. Doubleposting, especially with the Op/first post having little relevant content is both annoying and could get your thread locked before you have time to post your story.
Now, due to this being a massive fail as well as it made people spam for whatever reason they had, I am going to lock this and ask you to follow my advice with either copy pasting it or taking a screenie, and then make a new thread for this. Thanks.
