I decided I'd try and post some of my poems on here, since I liked the first line poem thread so much. I would really like some advice on how to improve. Thanks!
I was thinking of drawing more still life, rather than cartoons.
I'd like to see how well you do in that endeavor.
Thanks! I'm better now, but I apparently have a really low white blood cell count so I can get sick from just about anything. Which puts a damper on my summer.
Thanks! I'm better now, but I apparently have a really low white blood cell count so I can get sick from just about anything. Which puts a damper on my summer.
Glad your better, and that would suck. At least its not as bad as what I have.
Paraganglima is what I have in my neck. Have to get them surgically removed soon. Sounds like so much fun!!! (not)
Oh my gosh...I hope you get better soon! And I really hope the surgery goes well!
Well here is a poem I wrote for the nonet contest. I'm trying to debate whether or not it's worth writing for, because while I love nonets, judging takes a while and there are only three submissions.
Will you put on your finest armor? With gleaming breastplate and red shield- Unsheathe your sharpest weapon To once again fight death. Return in triumph, We'll welcome home The greatest Hero, You.
I'm also thinking I'll turn it into something longer. Like a saga or something like that.
That is the bad thing, it is not a disease, it is a kind of tumor. The only way to get rid of them completely is to have all of them removed surgically. I have three of them in my neck near my corated artery.
Here's another drawing. I know I was going to do still life, but I didn't have time to find something I wanted to draw and spend time studying and drawing it. Cartoons are much quicker, I find.
The appleâs smooth, little indents on the surface And small imperfections speckling like a starry sky, The red and green forming clouds and constellations.
Ringlets of light reflect the ceilingâs fluorescence, Circling where the stem once lay, The small remnant of where it was grown.
The apple sits comfortably in my palm, So close that I can smell the blossoms And Iâm brought back to my picture-book days, When I read about apple seeds and buds, Of trees that slept dormant in a blanket of snow. And I watched the pink flowers turn into fruit, Drop from the tree by fragile stems, A feast for raccoons and children alike.
My memory is filled with the sweetness of apples, And yet when I take a bite Itâs sour all the way down to the core. I wonder if I remembered wrong Or if maybe Things just arenât as sweet as they used to be.
Will you put on your finest armor? Your gleaming breastplate and red shield- Will you unsheathe your sharpest weapon And again fight death until it yields?
When you were young you fought the demons Those shadows that blocked your flaming path, Cleaved through the masses with your sword And stained your red road with seas of wrath.
How very young and brave you were! Fighting Hades where death resides, And travelling to the ends of the earth, And peering over to face the starry skies.
Saving princess maidens in distress, Locked by kings upon tall dark towers Taking them by their dainty hands and arms, And accepting all the wreaths of flowers.
But now you're shackled by Father Time, His lock and chain upon your wrist. Your old battle scars ache with age, And your stories are nothing more than myths.
And was the fame and glory worth it all? You watched your friends and companions fall, Felled from Life by Death's unflinching hand. You covered their faces with a ragged shawl.
Now you watch the young set off, Dreaming of all the gold and fame. You see them off with words of wisdom, Warning them of the wars and pain.
And then you'll rest your heavy head, You'll let your bloody banner fall, And you'll walk along the path of life The greatest hero of them all.
I really enjoyed this, it's a great take on the end of a hero's life rather than the traditional tale of the glory days. I did find "Fighting Hades where Death resides." to be somewhat repetitive, but perhaps that's just me.