ForumsArt, Music, and WritingPart of a new song i wrote. please critique

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DustyLee
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Feet on the Ground - Idle Life

-G Am C F G-

C Am
Look up in the sky ill show you whites and blues then look to your
F G
left thats your bottle of booze, youd drink it all night, if i let you.

C


C Am
Im not here to stick around, not even stayin long enough to touch
E F G
the ground, im flying high, over your head.

C Am
So before you call me out y dont u count your cards, looks like
F G
your 52 short but your life was hard, so thats ok, thats ok

C Am
and baby see that cigarette between your lips, yeah it really
Em
really really accents your hips, your lookin fine, but you know u
F G
are mine

-C Am E F G-

C Am
Look up in the sky ill show blues and whites, you said dont look
F G
down if your scared of heights, but i couldnt help my self
C Am
If you look in the mirror you'll see who won the fight, mother
Am F G
always said your temper would get you life, dont make her right
C Am
So before you call me out why dont u check your arms, you got every
F G
little problem scratched out in scars, across your wrists
C Am
cause' Baby you dont know what your doin here, but all that really
F G
matters is that i rest your fears, make it alright.

-C Am E F G-

C Am
Your, so, hot, but your still afraid of hell
F G
So just, go, on, being your self
C Am
Cuz your, so, not, like everybody else
F G
even if, you, dont, tell me how you felt

E
I know you know your everything i hate to write about
E
And i know you know your the only thing i couldnt live without
C Am F(stop) C
But i hope, you use that against me, to keep my feet on the ground

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DustyLee
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that Em In the first verse should actually be an E. sorry

howlett
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It's a bit mind boggling to read the song, with the notes in it.

DustyLee
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Oops that extra c chord after the first couple lines is wrong to. Should only be one sorry again!

master565
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Try recording the song (if you can't sing then just the music) so that we can listen to it.

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