I am going to post poems. A critique and feedback would be appreciated!
His Fate His aim was true, Pierced through their bodies, The arrows short and narrow.
Not one or two but three he slay, As every arrow flew, They came upon him, Hit and stabbed and poke and prodded.
But because of his bravery, They couldn't reach, His family in time, He to them was their most noble protector.
His body lay their for maybe a week, Then they came and took it away, On a boat and sent down the river.
Battle Victor The battle horn cries. See them clash together. One mans sword through another mans leather. He falls to the ground,Without another sound.
They are the winners,They are the best. They are the champions,They are Victors. But does it really matter,all those victories. Why must they fight,a fight that isn't theirs.
Did you do this, Kingjac? if so, not to be rude or anything, but the verbs must be linked into the same basic meaning. Also, the chronological sequence of events is important.
