Mike was walking one dark night. The sky was a purplish color and the stars shined like little glass spheres. Mike was thinking of how the stars shined when he pathetically tripped on a twig, and fell head-first into the dirt... Mike sat up, and if he was right, it was 12:00 AM and he was sitting like a homeless kid in the forest. Mike faintly remembered falling-so if he was here for so long, he must've gotten knocked out.
Hope you like my start-but this is only chapter 1.... Please tell me what I should do differently next chapter so I can make it the best! Thanks.
Every time you started a sentence about Mike it would start with the word/name Mike. I think you should only use Mike every 2-3 sentences. Other than that its a great start!
