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It seems a bit too tense from the constant piano base notes, but is softened by the piano chords and violins. It's almost too conflictive to really flow the way it should. Perhaps long, soft, and low chords would work better than a constant flurry of staccatos.

The problem is the entire song is fast paced. Try putting in one part where it slows down and it's all peaceful, before the song thrusts you back into seriousness. You also need more of an intro and outro. It's also kind of repetitive and to long. It's still really good it just feels like the base of a song, and you need to make the rest.

Thanks for the comments, I will consider that when I compose new songs, again thanks

At times, the tones seem a bit off pitch and the song does seem a bit repetitive. Also I noticed that the whole song is basically 2-3 loops (some at different octaves) that really doesn't have any breaks, intro, or smooth ending. I'm not saying this to be mean or anything, I just don't want to sugar coat anything and then have not have you improve. Things I think you should consider implementing for next time:
-Gradual intro
-some breaks near the middle
-tones that complement each other more smoothly
-A more relaxed ending as a pose to the sharp, sudden one in this one
But be sure to tell me when you make a new one, and I'll listen to it

But be sure to tell me when you make a new one, and I'll listen to it

Sounds like a good song for a game, I like its tune, but the ending should fade out or something since it just stops too abruptly. It kindof remindes me of that charlie brown song that he plays on the piano.

@Somewhat49, the music dont stop, it need to be looped because I compose in semi-videogame style. Anyway, thanks for the comment and Im glad that you like it

I like it, although it gets a little too repetitive. What program did you use to write it?

bfmv159, I use Finale, you must try it, is a great programm

I really enjoyed the song, but it gets repetitive and fast paced at times.

I get the whole emotion and feel for the song. It's very deep, and that's good. Even though it isn't supposed to be a happy song, it could still use some more higher melodies and notes in it. Just to grab the listener a more.
Good job Carlytoon.

thanks, I just gonna start composing new songs when the exams ends

Feel free to listen more of my songs in my profile.

Feel free to listen more of my songs in my profile.

I did, and they are absolutely incredible. You should make a thread with all your works in it to share with the community.