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Riptizoid101
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Riptizoid101
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Farmer

Hello there my name is Steve
I will tell you things you will not believe
I have many tricks under my sleeve
But I'm not here to deceive
you or leave
you
I know you got the key to
My heart
Its a start
But I know we're driftin' away
We're apart
Its ok though
I'll stay home and play dough
Sitting on the couch and watchin' tv
Nothin' see
Its a mystery
History, changing forever
The ones who survive
are the ones who are clever
This is getting boring
From the top of my head, snoring
I wish you knew the beat
It was quite a feat
Went together like a jigsaw puzzle
Attach my gun muzzle
Rob every bank with a shank.
Or a fork slash a spork
Whatever, I'm a dork
I will end this rap in a few more lines
Running out of things to say, payin' my fines
I don't need feedback, I don't need rhymes
Its coming to an end, this time

=D

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JellyBear
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Nomad

The rhymes were okay I suppose, but the overall song was inconsistent and lacked a central theme.

Riptizoid101
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Riptizoid101
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Farmer

The rhymes were okay I suppose, but the overall song was inconsistent and lacked a central theme.


Hence the "Random rap I decided to post" part.
TRUdog
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TRUdog
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Nomad

I agree with what JellyBear said. During halfway through I couldn't really see a solid meaning to the song. It was pretty good, though. I'd like to see more

zakyman
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Peasant

It's hard to read a rap with out a beat. Imma lay one down.

Boom, k-chika, boom, k-chika, ewewewewe

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