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LegendaryRedriders
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Nomad

I'm just trying to get a little feedback about the rap I just made. I was playing Call of Duty when I made this.

So I stop, drop collapsing n blasting,
Wrecking people is a skill I'm mastering,
K.D of 300 is boosting,
Yeah right those noobs just hate loosing,
I'm a ninja who just stabbed you in the back,
Being pro is a skill you'll always lack,
Don't even put up a fight,
Just start running in fright,
But they're already dead,
Put some led into their head,
Foot steps make no sound,
Walking over their bodies on the ground,
Crouching low,
Because who's round the corner you'll never know,
Come on let's go,
Dance around you to put on a show,
Because I'm straight up MLG,
People calling me Gucci,
I'm know as a God,
300 medals of Untouchable,
They say I got a mod,
Because so far I'm unstoppable.


Please tell me any improvements you suggest.

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zakyman
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Peasant

Well, as with all raps, I would request that you provide a basic rhythem so that I know how it would rhyme

LegendaryRedriders
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Nomad

1/8 boom-boom-boom-bu-bu-boom
That's the best way I can describe it.

bobber24LIO
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Nomad

thats really good and from how i rapped it its more of a fast rap then a slow one but its really good, u should make some more later

Somewhat49
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Nomad

led

It's spelled lead, I thought it was interesting
People calling me Gucci

If that's the word i think it is, then that's not a complement...
LegendaryRedriders
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@Somewhat49
thanks for the spell check, and the modern definition of Gucci is cool or pimping so i don't know what your thinking of.

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