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loomer50
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I worte this myself, and it sucks:


I am the best of all
I'm not quitting
I can beat the world
you are notthing
i will beat you down
keep you just a little bit alive
Because i am the champion
Ready to fear for your life?


Just listen, don't intterupt me
I am the best not you youre just a lucky
one time you got a good shot
and you got but now you gonna get got
You won't beat me,coz i am a survivor
you can smell my danger coming right at ya
If you would have chance, i wouldn't be talking
but you don't so shutn your mouth, lets get it goin
A punch, and another one and you are laying down
on the ground full in pain, so i guess you are out
Is your entire sight, covered in black?
Well get ready, cause i can still attack


I am the best of all
I'm not quitting
I can beat the world
you you are notthing
i will beat you down
keep you just a little bit alive
Because i am the champion
Ready to fear for your life?

You are done for, i hope you realize that now
but i am not done so here is another round
Oh its a pity, you don't seem to enjoy it
Well i do, and theres nothing you can do about it
I have been trying to find you ever since
you got one lucky punch and one of your lucky wins
You were just one day, now i can gladly say
that i've been here for much longer
and i am gonna stay.
I don't say you are nothing, youre worse than that
and i am gonna hit your face with a baseball bat
after 5 years of pure anger and frustration
I am going to offer you a little vacation
welcome to the hospital, this will be your new place
and if you recover, i'll claim this my base

I am the best of all
I'm not quitting
I can beat the world
you are notthing
i will beat you down
keep you just a little bit alive
Because i am the champion
Ready to fear for your life?

Are you ready for the biggest beating you have ever seen?
Are you ready for your longest ever dream?
I hope you are, because in a minute
this will be reality
and then you realize
this is my fatality
and i will chase, come over to your place
as long as i can get you
and i will race, i will face
so you won't continue

I am the best of all
I'm not quitting
I can beat the world
you are notthing
i will beat you down
keep you just a little bit alive
Because i am the champion
Ready to fear for your life?

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bobber24LIO
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bobber24LIO
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most of it doesnt rhyme at all

TRUdog
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TRUdog
1,031 posts
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Very cliche and generic rap. Not very creative. Also, I thought it was weird that you opened the rap with the chorus.

Maybe if you rapped about a different topic, you could add a little more creativity to it.

BladeBreaker
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I mean you no offense, but I found it funny that you said it sucked, then right after, in the chorus, you say you're the best.

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