if u have seen 8 mile then u know what i mean so someone start this up with me
wrote this awhile ago as my first rap so it sucks
all ya are is a fake i wont even give ya a piece of my cake let me tell ya i run this b*tch ill bury ya alive in a mada fackin ditch thats right im back in da game and ill make my 9mm go BANG pow pow pow ya on da street dead three shots to da head now ya scared to walk out the house ya probably scream if ya saw a mouse
"Someone try and diss me?" Yeah right, you blissfully listen thickly, so even distinct imaging will miss thee. To be or not to rip free, dip be- fore you get hit; quickly. I'm coming and gunning, shots, photos dumbing conceit. Too little from me? Take the front seat, wont pre- vent you from venting lonely, sentences foaming, your rhymes are rabid, I'll put you down like a fat kid.
Blade and bobber, you're not gonna stop me coz i will diss you both, you're making it way to easy I am the winner, the one and only Probably, you're gonna feel very lonely Forever alone, that's the way i make you feel Cause you are fake, and i am the real deal I got a handgun in my pocket and a knife in my hand so i can either cut you or shoot you trough your head.
If you want some rapping advise i can give you some good stuff.
1) Use a variety of different words, and try to use words with more than one sylable to make a rhyme. Like ahead and instead. Any additional sylables bring the rap to life 2) Go with the flow. You need to feel the beat of the rap. Ask if it is emotional or any other question to get you on track.
That's all I have right now. Ask if you want more advice.
@Bobber: Others have tried and failed this quest I guess you also failed the single first test To not bypass rules and go and swear Let the censor do its work or it'll end in despair Don't call others names and don't play smart Otherwise posting here will be pretty hard The lock pad near the title would mean your defeat But otherwise, I guess, your rhymes are pretty sweet.
Not that this isn't true for everyone else, of course. And please do disregard my sad attempt at looking cool and go for Soccergirl above, since she probably is more of a challenger than I would ever be.
Soccergirl, this not the place for you You might think that you have skill, but i will send you back to The make-up room where you go put on your mascara Or i will make you bleed inside a bath with a piranha Coz i have mah knife and my rapping skills The only skills you got are gossip girls Coz Girl, this is a guys playground Something you shouldnt mess with Coz you will end up like all the others Girl or not, you're getting your *** beat
Yes, Dare is a challenge something you don't give. You call things stupid even when you can't spell. As for skills you have no room to talk because yours are just like his boring and lame.
This is pathetic, your rhymes are lame, Your poetic talent snuffed like a flame. I've seen better style from a girl of two years, Who had far more talent and much fewer fears. Your insecurities palpable to my tongue, That when quickly ran this challenge is won.
look seriously it was a joke...i didnt mean any of it...i am the whitest person on the planet it wasnt supposed to be good...i apologize for you guys PMSing and freaking out about it
None of you have done any more than rhyme the words at the end of the lines. Loomer, your rhymes are terrible. Trippy, you didn't even make an attempt at a rhyme. Orion and Soccergirl at least said they didn't make the best of attempts, but yours don't even warrant a response in verse. Lilzo, join up if you think you got skilz, knuckka. Lol.
Welcome to my domain; I call it 'Club Space'. But don't get to close, or I'll have to spray you with mace.
I'm not talking meidevil knight, though I'll put you to flight. Knock ya straight in'ta outer space man, way outta sight. So you mad bro? You lookin' to fight? I'll have to warn ya that I move shiftier than the night.
My words are so powerful, they can even rhyme with 'orange'. I'll go pull the word straight outta the internet smorange. 'Cause o' that I earned myself a place atop Mt. Zion. They even let me into Heaven, without dieing.
My conversation with St. Peter was pretty sublime, But he told me to tell you that 'Its almost your time'.
