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BlPOLARBEAR
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See what I did there? Because bears have really short tails? Yeah, a bit far-fetched... It was bearly clever. Hahah! Ursa silly.

Anyways, I promised you a story, did I not?

Tim's Story (based on a true story that NEVER HAPPENED)

When Tim woke up, he had no idea of what was waiting for him. He got out of bed, and looked around, but it was difficult. The room was blurry, and he had to focus just to be able to see what was in front of him. He didn't recognise the room he was in, nor the clothes he was wearing. He could hear voices from the other side of the door leading out of the room. They were unfamiliar, and they spoke in a hushed tone, like as if they did not wish to be heard. Who were these strange people, where was he, and what was wrong with his vision. Had he been drugged and kidnapped? No, there was more to it... He stumbled across the room, and used his hand to search for something, anything, that could shed some light on the situation. On the nightstand, he found a clue. A pair of glasses. His glasses. As he put them on, he realized that his blurry vision was not the lingering effect of some sort of sedative, he was visually impaired.

With his vision fully restored, Tim resumed his search for answers. Now that he was able to see things more clearly, he could investigate his room further. Posters on the wall, books on the desk, a wardrobe... This was clearly a bedroom... Was it his bedroom? Why didn't he recognise it? That's when he realized... He was suffering from amnesia.

The end!

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thepunisher93
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Was it supposed to b a comedy?
If yes
then muahahahahaha

zakyman
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See what I did there? Because bears have really short tails? Yeah, a bit far-fetched... It was bearly clever. Hahah! Ursa silly.


I just puked in my mouth a little bit >.<


Ummmmmm, the story was....good?

I sort of cringe at the lack of even a cliffhanger at the end of this story, or the lack of closure. It could be improved, but if this is a first draft, than good job!
BlPOLARBEAR
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Was it supposed to b a comedy?


It was supposed to be a comedy in that "This is stupid, so why am I laughing?" kind of way.

I just puked in my mouth a little bit >.<


My work here is done.

Thanks for the feedback guys, if I ever develop the ability to blow stuff up with my mind, I promise to try not explode you first.
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