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Fantasy Story #1

The screaming of a child was pungent in the air of an open market. As a hooded figure strode through the crowded stalls, he couldn't help but scoff at the Drek architecture of a desert home. The baking heat of a star in its prime kept the figure's eyes fixated to the cracked, water-forsaken ground. The figure felt it necessary to investigate the child's screaming, as a crowd had gathered around.

A Drek guard, blue eyes shining in striking contrast to the orange sky, held his sword high above his head. The hooded figure calmly asked what was going on, and a stranger answered that the guard had just finished telling the child what a thief he was. The slender hooded man stood still, calm and understanding. The guard's sword made a sickening thunk on the wood of a crate as the child's cries grew louder.

As other cried, mourned, and mentally berated the guard for his ****able loyalty to the law, the hooded figure couldn't help but chuckle. Now full of merriment, he went on his way with his new backpack full of dried food goods and supplies. Almost skipping, the figure was ready to leave this hole. "Yeah, I'm going places" he whispered.

The figure stroked his bandaged chin. He'd had what he needed to survive outside the desert city's walls, but he hadn't a clue on how to get out. Having blown all his money on dried snacks, empty glass bottles and a canteen, the Drek hadn't a clue where to go. The man travelled to the city gates, and offered a job as a guard.

The first merchant caravan came by. It browsed a selection of guards for hire, by which the hooded figure stood. The caravan had a good deal of merchants, but by the precarious eye of the leader, their cargo was much too valuable to have a lack of guards. There were currently four guards beside our hero, and each was grotesquely strong and ridden with weapons. Their bold brows declared that they were busy men, with busier fists. Their scarred, bumpy arms struck fear into the caravans that passed by.

The caravan stared at the hooded man with curious eyes. His eyes were driven downward, as he feared eye contact. The caravan leader called, "Flex for me, hooded one!" On order, the man closed his eyes, spread his arms into the air, and flexed as hard as he could. The caravan leader laughed as he compared the hooded one with the other four guards. The guards, seeing his feeble attempt, chuckled with undertoned pity.

"Fools! I practice magic! I could turn you all into newts if I wanted," the hooded man yelled, fury in his unseen eyes. The guards laughed harder, as did the caravaners.

"Magic? Why would we possibly want a spellcaster when we can just use Dwarven weapons?" called one of the guards, toting his shiny silver clockwork rifle. The recent Dwarven-Tark war brought the practiced artform of war magic to its knees. No one would dare to take on a spellcaster when a good shot to the head would kill them.

The caravan picked one of the beefier guards, and left. Running to the dust-kicking wooden wheels, the hooded figure wailed in contempt, "The Tark were fools! They didn't know what they were doing- dammit! I know how to do it correctly!" Whispering an incantation under his breath, the hooded one tried to retain his cool. Finishing it, he smirked.

Another caravan passed, and when asking where the hooded traveller was going, they agreed to keep him as a "guard". They likely thought that the hooded one was some bum trying to get to the capital for a quick buck whilst begging. Some poor desert town was no way to make a man's stake. The leader, a female Tark dressed in fine hard leather, sat next to the hooded man. Her eyes looked him over and she saw not a single scrap of skin on him. "What's your name, stranger?"

The hooded figure looked up to the stars, but his hood did not fall. "Funny thing to ask a guard. You'd think you'd ask their names before hiring them," he snickered. The leader snickered back.

"Yes, 'hired'. So what's your name?" she pried.

"Alexander Raithcliff Jackson Archibald 'mcwinnerdinner' the 2nd," he teased. The leader, growing frusterated, stared off into the starry sky and growled. Feeling the hatred build up in his employer, the figure sighed, "Fine, my name's Jack."

"That's a pretty name," the leader said. Her green Tark eyes pierced into the side of Jack's head. "So you do magic, do you? What school are you trained in?" she asked.

"Balls to the schools!" Jack threw his arms into the air in his outburst. "The schools did nothing but send your people to its knees! My grandad knew better, my dad knew better, and I know better," the hooded one grew displeased with the mere mentioning of the five Schools of Magic. Corruption, Purification, Destruction, Regeneration and Manipulation were the letters of the Tarken Empire's doom. The thick-headed Tarken elders refused to go out of their comfort zone, and because of that their castle was sacked by the Dwarves with their clockwork and flintlock abominations of ill-gotten "science".

"Don't like the schools, do you?" she queried. Jack turned away from her, only to pull a book from his backpack. The back of the wagon provided just enough moonlight to read the bold letters on the leather cover.

THE FIRST BOOK OF ARCANISM- VOLUME ONE

"This is the only magic I'll ever need. My family's been working on it since my great grandpap. He knew what was up! I heard from my dad that he'd figured out the roots behind magic- what makes it tick," Jack explained, "but he died before he could write it down. Only thing he did write down was how to make new spells. Something that your elders never could have learned!"

The leader laughed at this hearty explanation, "You're funny! Telling me that your family knew how magic worked. Next you're going to tell me that the Tarks are actually half gnome half goblin."

Jack grunted, "What's your name, anyhow?"

"Cherise, thank you," she said. A sweet smile spread across her face and she laid down. "So glad that a wonderful spellcaster like you would come onto my family's wagon to protect us from all the monsters in these Drekonian wastelands," she chuckled.

Not sensing the sarcasm, Jack remarked, "Monsters? Worst you'd get out here is a giant sandworm, and they'll just spit out a caravan if it isn't full of food."

"You're really something, aren't you?" She chuckled.

Silent, Jack laid inside a bedroll, "Wake me up there's any trouble."

"Oh I'm sure I will, brave adventurer."

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MoonFairy
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Interesting! I don't like how the hero went from laughing at a child's arm being chopped of, to getting a job with a Tark, who I assume is good looking. But I'm willing to continue reading.

By the way, when did you return from the land of the gone??

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By the way, when did you return from the land of the gone??

Why, I returned yesterday! (obviously)

Jack's sleeping- and with it the dreams of pain and malice- came to a quick end as the wagon stopped abruptly. The wagoneer family of four was just outside. The leader Tark screamed at the top of her lungs. "Daddy!" she yelled. The father, grim faced and callous handed, looked upon an entire three-wagon caravan of dead men. Each had a good deal of dwarven weapons, along with a whole haul of dwarven energy crystals. The father looked about the caravan after telling his daughter to go back to the wagon.

Jack, entranced by this dead caravan, leapt to his feet and happily checked it out. His eyes met the dead leader at the front, along with his horses. Jack couldn't help but snicker as he saw the gun-toting guards dead, some with apples nearby them. Giddy with excitement, Jack looked to the ground and whispered some inaudible praise.

In his investigation, the father of the wagon was sniffing one of the perfectly preserved apples from the back of the wagon. It appeared as though all the meats were incredibly well preserved- despite a night of travel. The raw meats were shiny and elegant, and the fruits seemed to be as colorful as ever. The father picked up a delicious looking apple, and felt the uncontrollable urge to bite.

Jack hesitated a moment before slapping it out of his hand. "What's your problem, toothpick?" the father said, kicking up a cloud of dust with a single stomp.

"Something tells me that all these dead guys weren't bandits," Jack's voice quivered. Under the bandages, he bit his lip. He couldn't have his first job opportunity go by with this family eating all these poisoned goods. Chal'Nora did well when she poisoned the food for him, but he didn't think that it'd kill them. Not wholly caring about the whole 'killed around twenty people while getting away with it', Jack couldn't help but care about the money he'd be getting from this father at the end of the journey.

The father picked up the apple again, and looked it over, "Whatyou mean, little man?"

"I think the food might be poisoned, or-" his head traced off to the horizon. The sun's rays were gently breaking the darkness around them, "uh, something."

The father dropped the apple, and grunted, "What makes you say that?"

"C'mon, don't you see? A bunch of dead folks with only a day's worth of meals being eaten? Must've been assassins or something!" Jack put his fists on his hips, trying to divert any suspicion to him by acting valiant.

"Yeah, assassins," he said, walking back to his wagon. On the way, he took a few of the dwarven weapons. Jack, pocketing lockets and jewelry, wondered why the hulk of a man hadn't picked up more to line his pockets. "Stealing from the dead will give you a nice sturdy target on your back. I don't know about you tiny man, but I rather like having a clean slate," he explained. When asked about the dwarven weapons he stole, "I'm not trying to profit off of it, at least. I'll make up for it later."

At his destination, Jack leapt off of the caravan. He waved goodbye to the thick-headed Tarken family, and their broken morals. Book in hand, the hooded man strode to the great gates of Uldraugh. His eyes met the glory of the known world's largest metropolis. Three great cities piled onto each other- one floating in the air, one planted firmly on the ground, and another being the burden of an entire city- lodged inside the great crags of the earth.

The great chains attaching the third level of the city were a great sight to see, even on the horizon. The midday sun caused the horizon level city to be cast in twilight. The vampires came out to play and buy their goods while the mortals co-mingled. The taboos of the eastern world certainly did fit in well in these metropolis settings. But it wasn't the sanctuary of not being judged which drew Jack here, it was the opportunity. Uldraugh was the center of the Adventurer's guild, the holder of the Tark universities, and the untold headquarters of the Dae society.

It was here that adventurers were made and killed. If one wanted to be famous and legendary like the great founders of the nations, this was their first step. The world was largely unexplored. With ever-changing characteristics and large events happening every day, legends were praised and eaten up faster than food here. But this was not what Jack was here for. Best foot forward, he attempted to get to the Tarken university to spread his teachings of Arcanism- a long forgotten practice.
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I have a crappy attention span, so the second part will have to wait for a bit.
I do wonder, if you decided the tune of the story in the middle somewhere. It has a mixture of storytelling styles, one to go with some sort of fairy tale, a grim one, but a fairy tale none the less. The other... Perhaps a try at contemporary suspense or supernatural horror, perhaps a genuine try at fiction without actually wanting to.

Or perhaps it's just me being wrong.

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Perhaps a try at contemporary suspense or supernatural horror, perhaps a genuine try at fiction without actually wanting to.

This is how a lot of my joke writing ends up, semi-sadly. I can't put zero effort into it and I end up actually making something that passes with a C, when I meant to give it a D or an F while making it funny. It's like I can't just not try. It's a bugger for something like this.

But no, I didn't really decide upon the change of tone so much as it just kind of happened. I need more experience with fairytales so I tried this as practice and it ended up turning into something else. Fantasy, but not quite fairy-tale. I think I'll get back on the fairy-tale track as I reach the third story, which will come when it comes.
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