Well I'm feeling in a poetic mood. I'll probably post a poem or two every day. So we might as well get this thing started. -*ahem*
The going seems ever so slow. For the first time, I'm alone. Does anyone else even know? My heart feels as warm as stone. Follow me, I'll lead to nowhere. But we have much time to there. ===================================== My mind, so full of pollution. I can't control my fragile sanity. I'm a riddle begging for a solution. My entire world seems like vanity. No one knows the truth but you and I. So why does it feel like a shallow lie? - Sooooo what do ya think? Yeah I've been a little down in the dumps lately sooo.... and now I awkwardly and suddenly close the OP...
*clap clap clap * Amazing i like it, it has a great syllable count, you used great words , and your poetry has alot of meaning. Please make more!
Heyyy thanks for the encouragement, dude! It means a lot. I might have more tonight! - P.S. I'm open to inspiration from anyone. So if anyone has any suggestions for a future poem I'll most likely take them. Yeah, I'm just a crowd-pleaser like that.
You're never alone, you have AG. But yeah, just bring out more from the heart. Anything and everything you feel, don't just make it an influence, make it the cause of what you're writing.
But yeah, just bring out more from the heart. Anything and everything you feel, don't just make it an influence, make it the cause of what you're writing.
Okay, I think I get the general idea. -*ahem*
I fear the darkness of the night. I fear the emptiness of the moon. I fear I won't see tomorrow's light. I fear that I'll lose my grip soon. I know that daylight is coming near. But this lonely night is what I fear. - Well that's it for today folks.
Life is not about where your destination lies. Life is about how you're going to get there. The path you take will have many-a surprise. The path you take will not always be fair. But you must try to be happy with who you are. Only then, will you shine brighter than a star. - Okay. Now I'm done for the night.
The poem is gonna be a bit more cheerful than the rest.
-*ahem*
I know the mountain's summit can be found. I know the river's current can be crossed. Hope is there, just have a look around. Hope is has been found and once was lost. It's time to sing a brand new song. It's time for you to join along.
It's time to put on brand new boots. It's time to go and freely roam. Hope is finding a place to grow new roots. Hope is finding a place to call your home. I know the happiness that can be found here. I know the sound of peace, is what I hear. ---
I really should start titling some of these. But there you have it. What do you think? Is it better? Is it worse?
Good job, the first stanza i found rather heartwarming. Someone once said *ahem* 'Hope, at times, can be very weak but hard to kill.' I hope that quote has at least some relevance to your poem. Honestly, i found the poem you just posted one of, if not your best poems. I do think you should title them, however.
I hope that quote has at least some relevance to your poem.
Sure it does. hahaha.
Honestly, i found the poem you just posted one of, if not your best poems.
Thanks for the encouragement!
I do think you should title them, however.
Yeah I think I'll start doing that from now on. - Also, thanks for the feedback in general. Response from the audience is always welcome, whether it's constructive criticism, suggestions for new poems, or plain encouragement!
You sure know how to handle those words babeh. Your poems sound great when when you read them out loud, apart from their meanings. Although they dos seem a bit like a depressive man's thoughts. P.S.: Do you think I should post some of my leisure time poetry on the forums? Or maybe "There can be only one"? Lol.
