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Hm. Speaks to us all, as it were. A bit of enigma if you ask me, but beautiful. Keep writing, Saving123, for that was a great poem.

Thanks so much! And I have no plans to stop writing.

I find it very good. It's dark, but yet beautiful and elegant. Also the imagery is quite vivid.

It's really nice. Makes really fun to read, and it speaks to the reader, giving the reader a dark feeling.

Thank you again, and yes it does seem to be very dark, but I think that's why I like this one the most out of all of my other poems. I usually don't write poems, they aren't my strong spot usually.

I was inspired by somehting that I saw, and I mixed those feelings with my own dark feelings (Yes I had to dig deep for those) and wala! A beautiful wonderful dark, scary poem. I thought it was wonderful, but my opinion was biased, considering I wrote it, so I just needed other opinions, thank you all.

What did you see?

A Paint splatter, dark blue maybe, but at first I thought it was black.

It was very well written, but I have some suggestions

Break it up into stanzas. Because right now, to me it reads like a short story if anything.

Thanks for the suggestion, I will break it up, but any ideas where?

Darkness, it wraps itself around me, it binds with me, it attaches itself to me, like a parasite,

but much more different, (I would get rid of this)

I have a feeling that this relationship will benefit the both of us. What the darkness gives me is comfort; it wraps me in a cocoon of protection, guarding me from my own emotions,

my anger, my sadness, my depression, my madness.

And what I give in return for this protection, is my soul, and letting the darkness use my body as its temporary mortal host, this seems to be enough for the darkness.

I have received more than I ever could have been able to ask for, I, not only have let the darkness wrap itself around me and let it attach itself to me, but I have become so engrossed in hiding from my emotions, using the darkness as a curtain, I have become one with the darkness. I no longer am attached to the darkness,

but instead (remove this)

I am the darkness.

Thanks so much, not only did I get reviews, but I got improvements thank you! =)(=

Of course, you also might want to look around the poetry threads and ask fro some help there. Most of them are much better at it than my myself.

Thanks for the advice I will go over there bye then, thanks for the help. (:

Wait, exactly where am I supposed to be going? Haha, I have no clue where to go, I'm not a member of many forums.