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Saving123
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HEre is a poem I wrote it's sorta darkish, but I neede a couple of honest reviews please! So here it goes.

Darkness, it wraps itself around me, it binds with me, it attaches itself to me, like a parasite, but much more different, I have a feeling that this relationship will benefit the both of us. What the darkness gives me is comfort; it wraps me in a cocoon of protection, guarding me from my own emotions, my anger, my sadness, my depression, my madness. And what I give in return for this protection, is my soul, and letting the darkness use my body as its temporary mortal host, this seems to be enough for the darkness. I have received more than I ever could have been able to ask for, I, not only have let the darkness wrap itself around me and let it attach itself to me, but I have become so engrossed in hiding from my emotions, using the darkness as a curtain, I have become one with the darkness. I no longer am attached to the darkness, but instead I am the darkness.

So what do ya'll think?
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Kyouzou
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Look at the bold threads up top, see where it says weekly poetry contest tada! Be sure to read the rules on Page 1 before you submit anything.

Saving123
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Okay I will, thanks again.

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Four good reviews, thanks to all, that read it, and even more thanks to those who reviewed. (:

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