**I'll only post more chapters if I get good feed back and as I complete them (handwriten)**
The captial of Cardolin was nothing special. It reeked of sewage, filth, and the stink of human bodies packed to closely. Buildings were archaic, jumbled and huddled close together, like old men trying to keep warm on a winter's eve. The streets were ruled by gangs of children, urchins everyone of them. Yet even they answered to some form of order. Harthane, capital of Cardolin, City of Filth. No sane man moved his family here. No sane wie raised her children her. Hathane was the city of the dead and dellusioned. The only reedeming factor was it's wealth. But the wealth it brought in was controled tightly by The Guild. Only Shadows walked in The Guild. Only they became legends.
Pretty good but there are some interesting bits which you could of put more detail into. Also the continuation seems off to me and no character introduction or what they are thinking? The city you built is interesting but they characters seem like bricks to me.
I really like it but I would appreciate it more if you would take more time to write more per post so I could follow the story a little better; I think it would be a better format.
Oh the delays. I should have more time to write now so... this won't be so delayed. But I've decided that I will post the entire thing in one thread so it actually flows. Again I apologize for all the delays I've had a hard time writing because of personal things, a house renovation and just work. Also, thanks for the support guys, I appreciate it.
