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Okay, I will add on to this. The script will be on when I have a chance.

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Brian266
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Nice =). Zombies are finally taking over!!

XXAlienGirlXX
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Great job! its getting very suspenseful, I hope I make it. =D

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ty

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im thinking for my next chapter...

XXAlienGirlXX
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Yeah, put zombie in the story as John Steel!

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"AWESOME STORY"
"Great job! its getting very suspenseful"
"PLEASE LET ME IN THE STORY!!!!!!!!"

im sorry guys, but this is just SO undescriptive and SO fast paced, that it feels like one is reading a forum game. It's far too fast moving, all i've picked up so far? Zombies.... ship...escape pod... crash... sniper battle.. zombie army.... and very little in between... the basics, yes, the beginnings of a good story, yes! but you need more dialogue and description flowing in to it to make it complete. even in the revised first chapter, it was far too rushed.

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Am I In You're Story As Otto?

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Alien vs. Zombies... Omg... Totally awesome... I guess I would have to be on the alien alliance. Beacause they would have like these totally awesome futuristic weapons. Unless they were dumb aliens... That would kinda suck...

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"AWESOME STORY"
"Great job! its getting very suspenseful"
"PLEASE LET ME IN THE STORY!!!!!!!!"
im sorry guys, but this is just SO undescriptive and SO fast paced, that it feels like one is reading a forum game. It's far too fast moving, all i've picked up so far? Zombies.... ship...escape pod... crash... sniper battle.. zombie army.... and very little in between... the basics, yes, the beginnings of a good story, yes! but you need more dialogue and description flowing in to it to make it complete. even in the revised first chapter, it was far too rushed.


This is a writing project, I'm editing anything and adding more stuff to it, then giving it to him. Were going to try to get this whole thing as good as we can.
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Ty! :0 next chapter soon! srry

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Ok. Thanks you will be in it.

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Okay umm I almost got it. Thanks for your patince!

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Prologue

Year 4014. The world is now full of zombies, that have developed human like intelligence, and superhuman strength, making them even more dangerous. Everyday more and more people are brutally murdered by these creatures. 1433 year old Liara was an alien from the southern part of the planet Uranus, and was the captain of an elite star ship. The day of the outbreak was not a pleasant one for her.
She emerged from her cryo chamber and collapsed on the floor. She gasped for air, then pushed herself up and observed her surroundings. Blood everywhere, and bloody hand prints on her cryogenics chamber. She heard a strange moaning and readied her fists, all of a sudden a creature pounced on her. �Get off of me!!!� she punched it in the face, then ran for her life. She kept running, it was the only thing she could do.

I don't believe that there are aliens. I believe there are really different people.
Orson Scott Card

I personally don't believe in aliens. But, I do believe that there is something out there that is accountable for all these mysterious things that are going on: I think it is a spiritual thing not a material thing.
J.T. Walsh

I think anybody would have to be with out common sense to think there weren't aliens. There are billions of planets, and I am convinced Earth is not the only one that's inhabited. It would be quite an ego trip to think that. I think about it all the time.
Sabrina Lloyd

"It contains a recombinant virus. It takes your DNA and deconstructs it and reshapes it. The results can be phenomenal, super human like...or hellish."
Jerry, Day of the Dead 2: Contagium (2005)

"Every dead body that is not exterminated becomes one of them. It gets up and kills. The people it kills get up and kill."
- Doctor on newscast, Dawn of the Dead (1978)

"I have given them the last rights, now you do what you will. You are stronger than us, but soon I think they be stronger than you."
Priest, Dawn of the Dead (1978)
Chapter 1: Attack

Gunshots fired. �Take that mother******� said Ryan Jackson. He was the pilot of Liara�s ship, and was highly skilled in mechanics as well. He was of Marsian blood and had spent his childhood on Mars. The zombies approached the outpost, Ryan held up his radio �Close the darn gates! Private� Ryan heard static. �**** it!� Ryan ran up the hill to base camp. �Retreat!� Retreat!� yelled Ryan. The troops ran towards the ship, as the zombies broke through the barricades. �Come on Sergeant Walter!� yelled Ryan. Walter got up and started to run, when a zombie pounced on him, squirming for his life he tried to shoot the zombie with his gun, but it bit him on the arm. Walter pushed the zombie off, then got up and started running to the ship. It was called "Old Glory". It had got that name because it was always on the front lines of the battles. The ship took off, and Liara glanced at Walter who seemed to be in pain. �Walter are you bit?� Walter stood still for a while, then said �No�. A calmness seized the ship and everyone felt a sense of relief. Liara headed to her cabin, ready to retire to her bed, when all of a sudden she heard a terrifying scream. Red Sirens turned on, and chaos emitted the ship. Liara ran to the ships bridge, dodging zombies, and shooting them with plasma rifles. Liara just managed to squeeze through the emergency doors, when she noticed Walter, who was covered in bite marks and bruises. He jumped up and viciously attacked one of the crew members.
Liara shot Walter and the infected marine, brains oozing everywhere.
She fled toward the escape pod launch area.
"Get the escape pods ready!" Liara said.
"Yes mum" said the co-pilot.
"The zombies are messing with the engine!" A gunman said.
"Well fix it!" Said Liara,
Shooting many zombies
Liara hit the emergency door button and watched the titanium doors slam to the ground. She knew that it would not hold so they better hurry.
The surviving crew headed towards the escape pods. Liara reaches the escape pods, Ryan Jackson jumps in with a few more crew members. �Lets get the hell out of here� says Ryan Jackson, as he pulls the escape shuttle launch button and heads down to the planet below. �Hold on tight, its going to be a bumpy ride.� said Ryan with a smirk. They felt a big shake, and the escape pod slowly headed down onto the planet.



Chapter 2: Crash Landing

�Were not going to make it, were not going to make it!� screamed a marine
The ship rumbled, and Liara could see pieces being ripped off, the glass broke and more marines started panicking. �Losing control!� yelled Ryan Jackson, as the ship plummeted face first into the ground.
Liara woke up dazed and confused with no recollection of the previous events. �Where am I?� said Liara. Liara felt the straps around her chest and quickly undid them. Liara glanced in front of her, and saw three marsians in their seats dead, with dried up blood on the seat and dripping from their lips. Liara glanced at the pilots seat that seemed to be empty. Liara stepped outside, and looked around. It was all flat, dry, desert wasteland. There was some ruins ahead, They were brown like the land. She thought for a moment about what she was going to do here. Liara headed for the ruins, and noticed that she was limping. Her leg was bruised and bloody. The ruins had writing that looked like gibberish, but one Liara approached it closer, she could tell it was ancient Uranian. She entered the ruins, which seemed to be a fairly small room with walls around it and strange pillars. Liara saw two men inside and suddenly remembered who they were. Ryan turned around running towards Liara. �Captain!� he yelled, she suddenly noticed more marines with Ryan. �We thought you died in the plane crash� Said Ryan in a troubled voice. �Well I�m here right now aren�t I?� said Liara with a smirk. She always felt as if Ryan had feelings for her but never managed to prove it, but their always was those moments when she could have sworn that their was something between them. Ryan handed Liara her plasma rifle. the gunman had a assault rifle, and Ryan had a sniper rifle.
They had set up camp in the ruins, and they had sent other men to patrol the areas to make sure that their are no infected close by.
"Lets set up camp here" said Liara.
"Agreed" said Ryan.
(A moment later)
"Well" said Ryan,
"It was like a dream, all the rear gunman turned into zombies"
"Corporal Ryan Jackson" said Liara.
�Are you-�
Liara was cut off by the radio turning on and one of the scouts
�Aaaaaaaah! There killi- (static) everyo- (static)
The static continues then it finally stops and Ryan puts down the radio.
�Shhh, someone�s coming�
All is silent until twenty zombies climb over the ruin walls and attack the marines, One zombie grabs Ryan, and Liara quickly shoots it. Liara shoots four zombies but then retreats to a passage in the ruins. Ryan and Liara run into the desert, hearing screams in the distance.

Chapter 3: The Long Run

Liara grabbed the ledge and hauled herself up.
�Come on Ryan!� yelled Liara
Ryan soon came running, four zombies on his tail, Liara shot one of them.
Ryan ran toward the edge of the crevice, and took a huge leap, then quickly grabbed hold of a ledge.
Liara reached for Ryan as he hanged over the crevice, the zombies leaped on to Ryan, two of them fell to their death, but one held on to Ryan, trying to bite him.
�Ryan!� Screamed Liara, trying to pull him up.
Ryan struggled, but the creature held on to his leg and bit him, the blood oozing down his leg. Liara pulled Ryan up, and noticed his leg, suddenly she felt as if she had lost all hope.
�Liara�� Said Ryan.
�I�m sorry that I could not be a better corporal� Ryan crawled to the edge, prepared to jump off, when Liara ran to him and hugged him. �Ryan� I love you.�

Liara had her hand over Ryan�s shoulder, she was not going to give up on Ryan.
�L-Liara, I s-s-still think y-you should l-leave me here� Said Ryan, his throat tasting like blood.
�No, Ryan. We will find a settlement, then get you a cure�
Ryan�s breathing became panting, and Liara could feel the sweat seeping down on her soft blue skin.
Liara could hear a strange click as she stepped on a particular part on the grass.
Suddenly a loud horn sounded.
�What the hell is-�
Liara quickly leaped to the side just as a huge net sprang up from the ground, picking Ryan off the ground. �Stop, were not zombies!� Screamed Liara, as she noticed the design of the net. It was designed to trap its pray, then close in, and razor sharp webbing was designed to cut prey into cube like squares.
Liara could hear strange voices, that turned to screams, and shouts. Several aliens with beige skin came down with spears and plasma rifles. They through a strange gas at them and Liara could feel her brain cells screaming, She then closed her eyes.

Chapter 4: Survival of the Fittest

�Stop!�
Liara woke up, then stood sat up on a stone bed, with no idea how she got there. She then remembered the net, and Ryan.
She stood up, viewing her surroundings, she seemed to be in a temple, but all entrances seemed to be blocked off, by massive stone.
All of a sudden the enormous rock was pulled to the side.
�Huh?�
Liara noticed five other stone beds in the other room. She ran into the other room, and the huge stone shut suddenly. Green figures lied on the stone beds, Liara backed away slowly, reaching for her plasma rifle, but noticed that she was not carrying one.
The figures leaped up, one by one, and Liara new that this was not going to be an easy battle.
The zombies howled in an obscene language.
Liara glanced at the wall.
�A weapon shelf!�
The zombies sprinted towards her. Running for her life, she sprinted to the weapon shelf. She grabbed three spears, then she ran toward the zombies, she stabbed one of them in the heart, then threw her spear at another. She did a spinning kick, then stabbed the zombie six times in the chest, then roundhouse kicked it in the face. Take that �bit-� all of a sudden Ryan who was now a zombie, leaped from the ceiling, slamming her face to the ground. he scratched her skin, shaking her with brute force, and moaning in a obscene language. Liara screamed, as Ryan bit her on the shoulder, tearing a chunk of flesh off. She clawed at the floor, while being dragged, but managed to grab her spear. She quickly turned around and threw her spear at Ryan, pummelling him to the wall. Aching in ever possible way, Liara moaned in pain then stood up. She heard the giant stone rock that was blocking the second exit in the first room suddenly open. She limped as fast as she could, putting pressure on her shoulder. The warm blood seeped down her shoulder, and Liara started shaking. She knew that If she did not get out soon she would be on of those zombies. Liara entered the jungle, and was soon embraced by a cold rain.
After limping for a while, Liara noticed that she was getting closer to the crash site, and she could see the ruins in the far distance. She kept on limping, and the pain soon became unbearable.
�I�m so, close� only a bit furth-�
Liara collapse on the cold desert floor, gasping for air, and her lungs felt as if they were exploding. She just lied there for hours, until a figure approached her. It grabbed her and hulled her away.
�N-no� gasped Liara
Sharp objects seeped into her skin, and she screamed out in pain, her vision became blurry, and the air became soft, she then closed her eyes and fell asleep.

Chapter 5: Safe at Last?

�Ryan I love-� When she woke up there was blood everywhere, and all of her loved ones lying dead on the ground, there was so much blood, she gasped for air, but there was only the putrid smell of decaying flesh. She then noticed that she could not feel her face, she the noticed that she had no face�
Liara woke up screaming, and drenched in sweat. She stood up from her mattress, and noticed that she was inside a tent. She suddenly noticed that she was naked, her breasts jutting in a strange way, and her body felt numb. She grabbed a uniform hanging on a hook and quickly put it on. She exited the tent an noticed five Marsian soldiers who she recognized immediately as her crew.
�Does anyone know what planet we are on�
�Yes, it is called 91 Aquarii Ab�
�Captain!� one of them shouted.
The Marsians started shooting, and Liara was handed a rifle by one of the gunners. Zombies.
�You see that structure in the distance?� Said a gunner.
�Yes, what about it� said Liara with a confused look.
�We think those things are coming from there, we have demolitions we might just be able to-�
�How many have you lost so far?� asked Liara
�Two�
�Well I guess we don�t have much of a choice� said Liara shooting a zombie in the testicles.

Chapter 6: Darien of the Zombies

"Intruder" A voice said.
"Who is it?" Commander Darien said.
"Captain Liara" the voice said.
"Let me do a DNA test" the voice said.
"Okay hurry up" Darien said.
"Liara is one of those filthy aliens" the voice said.
"I know that!" Darien said.
"Okay" the voice said.
Darien slammed the hologram to the ground. He ran out of the room, as he was running, he saw something behind his ship.
"Rear gunman, fire!" Darien said.
He could hear pellet shells from the guns rip across the tile floor. He was now satisfied. "This atrocity Liara wont know what hit her� he said to himself. He then laughed evilly, and approached the battle.

Liara knew a storm was brewing, As Liara ran with her troops, She could see nothing in the distance. She had one pack of ammo left and she needed to be very smart to know how to spend it. Then in the distance she could see dust spreading like a cloud.
"Get ready" she said.
Her mind was racing. Who could that be? Sure she was attacked by a wave of zombies, but how could it be reproducing. She thought for a moment of silence. All of a sudden several troops were pounced on and bit, Liara fled towards the Ruins. She laid down and crawled towards the Ruins. She saw him. She now had a clear shot on his head. She fired. She saw the body turn over lifelessly and ran and loaded the last bit of ammo in her plasma rifle. She wondered if she was the only one on the planet now. Then right there, she saw a wave of zombies coming. She had no choice but to surrender.

Here is the story so far.





SHOULD THIS BE IT SO FAR?

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Great job! this is fantastic.

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Srry been at school. thanks for patience.

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