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ExplosiveDynamite
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Uhm.. yea, well, I'll post everything I wrote here, like poems, haiku's even one's from themed topics, so yea.. :P

And, just one to start of my "new" thread..

Hey, guys, this is my thread,
Everything here, what I made.
Haiku and a poem,
Everything wrote, from my home.
What I wrote, didn't take me long,
Hopefully, they'll be effective and strong.
So, hope these are good,
They certainly could..

Wrote this in 5-10 minutes, at 00:35, so.. :P I'll hunt up some of my crap, and post it here, give feed back and what not.

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ExplosiveDynamite
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Thanks for the tips, and critiques guys.

I just changed this up..

Water, to put out fire,
Fire, to burn the lands of earth,
Earth, to give us air.


Didn't realize it was 7-7-5 so, I'm going to edit it!

Elements, of life.
Going through us everyday.
We - depend on them.
MoonFairy
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Better but why the -?

ExplosiveDynamite
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I'm not sure why I used the hyphen, I just think it looks better with it, maybe not.

MoonFairy
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Oh. It just seemed like you used it for a pause, where it wasn't needed. Your poem, your hyphen. Lol. More soon?

ExplosiveDynamite
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Depends.. more what, poems or haikus? :P

MoonFairy
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Poems. I want to see if you learned that you don't have to rhyme. Try your hand at a non rhyming poem.

IcyIndia
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Poems are haikus.

Anything. MoonFairy needs something else to demolish.
I'm joking.

Yeah, more anything.

IcyIndia
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Poems are haikus.


Are they?

And yeah, non-rhyming stuff is cool.
ExplosiveDynamite
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Haha, non rhyming, okay.. lemme see what I can think up, give me a few minutes.

MoonFairy
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Well it is a form of poetry, but you get the picture.
Demolish? Whaaaat?
Well yeah. I MIGHT of been too harsh on this newbie. But, I know I did relatively the same thing and I hate the fact I did that as well.
~indirect apology~

ExplosiveDynamite
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Wait.. erm.. how do I wrote a poem that doesn't rhyme?

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ExplosiveDynamite
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Oh yea, I'm just going to ask this thread to be locked.. I'm failing.. hard.

IcyIndia
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too harsh on this newbie


No, you weren't. I was joking.
You're not failing. Don't get it locked.
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