Your meter is off. Badly. Lines run on and others stop. The couplets are nice, but they're not used properly to make the poem work well. You speak of continuation, but it feels as if you end with a contradiction. I have no problems with contradictions, however, I'm lost as how the poem goes from this to that. Also, your couplet stanzas seem to jump without any thought to them. Perhaps I'm lacking the insight right now, but there just seems to be an organizational problem with this poem.
uummm... I guess my responding comment didn't register? But, I said, I accept constructive criticism in the fullest of ways, and I wrote this in literally, 5 minutes.
Yeah, I agree with the other guys, contradicting, and not rythmical, but I guess you could consider it good, based on the time you spent on writing it....? lol
