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Oh crap , I just finished it then :/ I guess I could make a few adjustments.

Lets just say CPL Miller got Assassinated.

The Final Chapter

In Village Courtyard,Afghanistan, Asia, October 9, 2001, 13:02 Hours


The Bravo 24 were in the middle of a battle between them and about 10-15 Militia. SGT Legend was sniping on a Mountain near by while Capt. Holden , PFC Fury , General Vinster and CPL Google were behind cover , firing their M4A1's and FAMAS's. (CPL Miller got Assassinated.)

Suddenly a Militia tank comes from over a hill to the East. "Sir , We have a problem." Legend said on the radio. "What's the problem?" Asked Capt. Holden. "A tank coming from the hill to the east , Sir."Answered SGT Legend. General Vinster and Captain Holden Turn their heads slowly towards the eastern hill. "Holy Sh*t , TANK!" Yelled Capt. Holden. "I'll destroy it with an RPG." Said PFC Fury with confidence. "That's the problem we have no RPG on us."Replied CPL Google. "Alright ,Boys Looks like we will have to find an RPG. Search High and Low." Explained General Vinister.

So the Squad tried to find an RPG with getting shot after all the searching they found one. "Alright , Google You get the RPG and blow that tank up , I want to see some explosions." Ordered Capt. Holden. "Yes , Sir."Replied CPL Google. So CPL Google aimed the RPG at the tank , He fired the RPG and missed! "Dang it , Google. How Could you miss?" Asked General Vinster with an Angry tone. The tank rotated the cannon towards the squad members. "Oh sh*t , It's aiming for us! RUN FOR COVER!" Yelled PFC Fury. So they ran to cover and the tank only just missed them.

CPL Google jump out with the RPG in his hands and fires it again but this time he got hit it. "Nice shot"Complimented PFC Fury. "We still have the Militia infantry to worry about still." Explained Capt. Holden. "I'll pop them off."Answered Legend. "Good."Said Holden.

So one by one , Legend pops them off . "Nice , Head shots." Complimented CPL Google. "Thanks." Replied Legend.

A few days later the squad got sent back home after eliminating the Militia Leader.



That was the Final Chapter , Yes it was a bit short but I don't like writing long stories , Hurts the fingers.

Hope you guys Enjoyed!

Where are the rest of the parts?

Part 1 is on Page 1

Part 2 on Page 2

Simple Yeah?

Will you be making more stories?

Maybe Later on but it won't be another war one , It will be based on the Medieval time and the "Kingdom Of AG".

That seemed pretty good, I see you have an act for writing stories.

Yeah , My English teacher says I have a talent for writing stories too.

I LIKE IT.
Yes you have talent, but your dialouge gets a bit dry when you continuously say 'He answered.' or ' he replied' over and over and over lol. Get a thesaurus XD
But it is still great

Lol , Thank you for the feedback .

Yeah I guess I need to work on that. I'll just use Dictionary.com , They have a Thesaurus on there somewhere.

Yep. right beside the tab that says dictionary.
I visit that site often when I'm around the WPR section XD

This is the first part that actually had mild course language. Wow , I only just noticed that now.

Thats really good, can't wait for part 3, how much parts will there be in total?

Scrap that sorry, didn't see the final part post, lol!
Sorry for double post.

Great story, really enjoyed reading it, what age are you?

Thanks for the positive feeedback .

I am glad you enjoyed reading it and I am 13 years old like it says on my AG Profile.

I wanna be in it

You will be in the next story then.

This Story is finished. I'll make another story later in another thread .

Holden, epic***ish )) it's nice