Forums → Art, Music, and Writing → The "PERFECT INFECTED".

im definetely pretty sure after reading this that english is not his foremost spoken language due to some similarities i notice to foreign languages.

I'm sorry but I have to say that you have to type clearly. At least look through what you typed. I try to type with proper grammar unless it is with my good friends. It is a good habit to have. Maybe people will see the good idea you have if you were typing properly and your spelling would be correct. When I read it, I feel like you are looking at the keyboard and not looking at the screen.

One more small note, I found it irritating when you put quotes around 'erfect infected' AND made it in capital letters. It pops out too much.

Other than multiple typing errors, I think that your storyline was decent.

Atleast I'm still puting some kick on it.

Nice but needs better grammar meybe some more time of writeing it out.

no,not true.english is ALL I know and that is final,no more questins about what toung I speek in becouse english is all i know,period,end of this little comverasion.

but the main question is,how old are you?

Aliengirl, it would be nice if you didn't just post for the sake of posting >_>

I don't think his age is the issue here. Any work that is posted in the AMW should be legible at the least.

it is true what jezz is talking about.jezz is right in her way,not youres Aliengirl and that was soo rude to say that Aliengirl.

Any work that is posted in the AMW should be legible at the least.

it is true what jezz is talking about.jezz is right in her way,not youres

Aliengirl and that was soo rude to say that Aliengirl.

I guess but i came in here to read his story give feedback yet every one wants to talk about grammar. listen now. F grammar!

age:not telling.
typing speed:not teling.
spellingcheack:not telling.
any more stupid questins like that:no more stupid questins on this page,period.

And why do you need to know my blasted age,common people.grow up and get a life!!!!

Okay, gotta step in now.
If you are unable to behave properly and get/give constructive critique, then perhaps you should not put up your writing/post your critique.

And advice: Try to actually write out your stories carefully, and use a spell checker. An understandable language invites the readers to spend the time reading your stories. Besides, if you don't want to spend time on making sure the story is somewhat comprehensible, the readers will not spend the time reading at all.
I think this is what people have been trying to communicate though some of their more rude advice.

As for the people going "The grammar!" "Things to work on *list*" and similar, perhaps you need to step down from your pedestal and go work on your own ability to give constructive critiques, and not just critique.
Asking someone over and over how old they are and if they are suffering from a mental disorder is, if continued like this, considered harassment, and does not count towards helping in any way. He is obviously not going to answer you, and for all it matter, there is no reason to either.

grow up and get a life!!!!

Alright.

I like the idea you're going with, darkwolf, but, as others said, you need to be able to express it better. Use a wider array of vocabulary, improve on grammar, and work on the flow of the story itself, not jumping from one idea to another so quickly.

As Cenere said,

Try to actually write out your stories carefully, and use a spell checker.

ok,I beleve you ABarOfSoap but not the person above you ok.

Im sorry Darkwolf, I dont even remember what I said... but I just was not able to understand most of the story.