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LivingToDie
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Nomad

I'm the fire in your eyes
I'm the passion in your soul
I'm the burning in your mind
I'm the pain that has a role
I'm the star shining in the sky
I'm the clouds watching from up high
I'm the man who plays the part
I'm the demon watching from the start
I'm the lies that make up your life
I'm the man that brings your strife
I'm the stings that pull your arms to wrap around shadowy walls.


Alright, just created one of these for fun seeming as a lot of other people have them.
Feedback wanted.

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LivingToDie
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Nomad

Searching for a point.

What's the point of life?
Eventually we'll die,
Wasting our time here.

I'm not sure if that's 5-7-5 it depends on how much syllables you classify 'eventually' as, I say it with five.

LivingToDie
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Here's something I submitted for the 'Tanka' contest, not sure if the syllables are correct but anyways:

My last supper.
Swallowing these knives,
Rupturing my arteries,
Coughing up some blood,
Tossing in another knife,
Finishing off my last meal.

LivingToDie
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War

When Mexicans invade the US,
War will be spread across nations,
A bloody mess throughout the world,
People searching for some salvation.

TackyCrazyTNT
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These are depressing, man.

What's the point of life?
Eventually we'll die,
Wasting our time here.


I thought you read my short story. :/
Or maybe you missed the purpose.

Swallowing these knives,
Rupturing my arteries,
Coughing up some blood,
Tossing in another knife,
Finishing off my last meal.


I believe all the syllables are correct. The imagery is vivid but scary. O.o
LivingToDie
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I thought you read my short story. :/
Or maybe you missed the purpose.


Aye, I got the purpose of your story but I just had the need to write something and depressing is all I can think of.
LivingToDie
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Why can't I think of anything that isn't a depressed emo style of writing. ><

Nothing

Rest my friend,
Think of nothing,
Let everything go,
Have a blank mind.

Enjoy those splinters,
Piercing your corpse,
You won't feel it,
Enjoy having no pain,
No emotions,
Let yourself go,
Into a dreamland,
Feeling nothing,
You're cured
From this disease,
We call life.

LivingToDie
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Nomad

Joy Spreads
Happiness pouring out of our hearts,
Melting into the bliss of life,
No evil within our souls,
Everything is perfect,
Joyous people around,
Nobody depressed
Throughout the world,
Smiles of warmth,
The joy
Spreads.

SupaLegit
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Wow, and I thought I had some dark writing! O.o

Don't take it the wrong way, it is very good, and very dark.

"The Path" and "My Last Supper" appealed to me. The imagery was so vivid in the Supper one, and the meaning in The Path was overwhelming; very, very great job!

LivingToDie
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Thanks!
I really appreciate the feedback, Legit.

LivingToDie
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Going to get this locked, sorry to the few who enjoyed reading my poetry.

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