This is my thread for posting my poetry. Most of it is upsetting. Please comment and make suggestions. I will post often as I have a lot of feeling and emotion.
Not Anybody, But You
Your love is the key to my happiness, Waiting for a kiss of an angel. When our eyes meet, it lights the room, All alone too painful.
If I take you to the promise land, Our sighted future, hand in hand. Every push to every shove. To every kiss, to find our love.
I'll idolize you, If you give me a clue. Will you stomp on my heart? Leaving me blue?
The question asks, will you be my one? Will we ride off into the sun? Never felt this way about a soul. Not schoolgirl cheerleaders on girls on poles.
Give me a chance to find your heart. Don't let your dark side Tear us apart.
I like the one above me^^ because it shows a honest expression. Your poetry is very relatable. Like you can look back to something as if it was so close. I also like the way one line relates to another so smothly. They start off strong, go higher and drop down with a nice punch. PLease make more.
I like the one above me^^ because it shows a honest expression.
That one, is the most honest. I loved a girl, who I thought was the one for me. I was friends with her for a while, but then was ignorant and careless of me ever since she knew my feelings for her. Another girl, was the sweetest, caring person to me. She listened, she talked to me like a normal person. I'd rather fall in love with someone with care, than be friends with a crush that treats me like crap. That's the moral.
Like you can look back to something as if it was so close.
And that's the main ingredient. Travel back to find out what you were feeling.
PLease make more
No.
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Fine...
Victorious
Never thought I've overcome, The fate I met today. A glancing look, read me like a book. A challenge was on the way.
Now I stand before them all. Standing out, not a brick in the wall. With more to come 'round ever corner, I'll forever be, the courageous warrior.
OHHHHH! The rhythm is really good. It's suspending and gives you a sort of "BAM!" feeling when you get to the next line. There is no distinct rhyme to it which builds up the action of it. Its like you can instinctivly feel the rhyme but you keep reading so you don't immediantly find it. These are really nice.
Oh, and
No.
Lol, I actually belived that until I saw what was under it. Tushay acmed. Erm I mean Mr. Dr. Professor Acmed the somethinsometinsomethin.
