"Why are you following me?!" She exclaimed. "You look like a... tasty time." He said with an evil chuckle. "What are you..."She begs. "Just a hungry bystander." He says as he comes closer. "Why me, ... Why me?" She says as her life slowly and painfuly comes to an end. _______________________________________
When you think about life. What do you think of? Do you see a world where things are possible? A bright future? Or do you see a world where we are all in chaos? Every man for himself? If you think of the first one, stop reading this right now. Just exit out, and never think of this again. Go live your happy life. But if you chose the second one, ... well, you might be able to keep reading. This is My world. The bad world you might say. You could think this is a fantasy. But it is real. You just need to open you eyes. This is a world where every step you take, someone might kill you. If you are to survive, You have to know about everyone. I will tell you about a few if you want to know. The few that are okay to be around, are the fairies, a few of the elves, maybe a demon or two, some of the wolves. But I don't know of any vampires that are good. Besides my self that is.
The fairies have many classifacations, but that would take a while. The Elves.... are playful you could say. But they are dangerous if you piss them off. Demons.... oh the demons... The ones that are okay, are the money hungry ones. They are the ones that will do anything for money, and don't care if a human is the one that gives the payment. You just have to make the highest offer. The wolves are nice you could say. If they realize that you are better in combat, they will be good. But the vampires... Pure evil. I have never met on that isn't. I am not saying it isn't possible, but I havne't met any. Ever. And I have been here for quite some time.
I haven't introduced my self have I? Well then. I will give you my name. But not right now.
You see, I am a book in the making, and my author is thinking about these certain things, like names and such. If you would like to be in the book, I think you should get to know my author and she might add you. my author is MoonFairy. Did you know that in my book there are Moon Fairies? Yep. There are. Anyways. My author is really awesome, and would like it if you posted a comment or two on what you think of me so far. If you do, She might finish my chapter! Do you know how happy that would make me?!?!?! I WANT MY CHAPTER TO BE FINISHED. YOU BETTER COMMENT OR ELSE I WILL FIND YOU AND HAUNT YOU AS THE CHAPTER NEVER FINISHED! Okay yeah so you don't want that do you? DO YOU?! Okay then. Comment and my author will think I am important enough to finish! Please?! I WILL LOVE YOU FOREVER! Thank you!
hahaha that's fine. I just gotta get to know you lol and Silent, Your aplication is pretty nice. I got it down, and I think you might be on of the people that starts off the book... xD Kyo, are you gonna make an application? Or do i have to make it for you? You might not like what I add you as... xD
Aren't we paying attention. You are correct I have an IQ of 138, being a ninja would be awesome but I'm somewhat terrified that Strop would hunt me down lol.
XDDDDDDDDDDDDD LMFAO. And you sure you don't wanna be a ninja? I will ask strop if I can add him in it, and you can be his apprentice or something.. xD
nah man, I will add you, I just gotta get to know you, so I can get your basic personality and kind of stick your characters personality and your own personality together. I have a weird way of writing people that I know into books, but no one has ever told me that they didn't like how I put them in.
Oh no I want to be a ninja...besides I was kidding about strop, *looks around nervously* And no I'm not going to make an application, if you're going to be stubborn, so am I. The Constitution gives me the right to act like I'm 5. (Anyone who doesn't know jack about the Constitution, ignore that otherwise your government teacher might get pissed at me, lol )
ETA means what? Estimated Time A.... ? XD I might type something tonight, but I have a performance 2moro, so my mom might make me go to bed. I will type up your point of view later tonight though. Not an actual chapter. Your character will (hopefully) make the evil vampires more outlined to the people that read it.
Hey moon if they're evil they need to be you know EVIL AKA savage blood thirsty 'I'd sooner tear out your throat then look at you!' kinda evil. The kind that abuse baby animals.
FINE KYO! I AM MIAKING YOUR APPLICATION RIGHT NOW. ENGUETLKJASDGFSLKDJBASF GAH!
Name: Baka Age: 5 Species: Teenage mutant ninja turtle Evil or Good: Neither. Just a noob for now. Height: 3 feet 8 inches. Body type: Was fat, now with his ninja training, he isn't AS fat as he was. Eye Color: A dark blue ish. not that outstanding. Skin Color: Green. He is a turtle. NAW DUR. Hair Color: He has no hair! :O Attitude: Thinks he is awesome, but really he is just a noob. Background: Found by the most amazing ninja horse Strop. when Baka was just a few days old, Strop found him in a dumpster while he was doing something ninja-ey aka shirking his responsibilities. Strop has tried to raise Baka as a ninja, but Baka went into kung fu panda mode and ate everything in the kitchen on a daily basis, thus giving our little Baka obesity.
and i know how to make evil! lolololol my neighbor calls me the devils spawn and tries to sprinkle holy water on me when I walk to the bus stop in the morning. He has done that the etinre year.
question the reader in the opening paragraph, also quite cliche
addressing the reader in the beginning, in attempt to garner interest, is cliche to the max. the jump from second person to first person is slightly confusing.
Nah, it's alright. I want ALL people to read my book, not just writers. I appreciate that little tidbit of crticism on what I wrote from you. I took it as constructive anyways, so its all good.
