Well hi there. As some of you may know, I had a previous writing thread. But I was so sick of reviving it, I had it locked. I would LOVE it if you gave me actual feedback, not just "lol I like it." That is a bummer. You have no idea, putting time and effort into something but just saying you like it. Tell me WHAT you liked about it. Or what you thought could be better.
Now. I'm not gonna beg or anything, but PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE DON'T LET THIS THING DIE!!!!!!!!!!!! See? No begging.
Now. I will post all of my poetry shiitake from my old thread, so new people can have a looksie.
And I love everyone that told me to not give up. You know who you are, mah peeps. Sure it is torture looking back on what I wrote, but I really like poetry, so I'm gonna keep hoping I make something great.
Atop a cliff I wonder Staring down into the water What it would feel like, Those few seconds of free falling
Fear? Adrenaline? Terror? Thrill?
I might just take the jump To find out. ____
Many a sleepless night I found, Myself thinking of you. The way you walk, The way you sing, The way you talk. The more I think of you, The more I dream of you, Without ever actually sleeping.
Why me? I ask myself all the time. Why me? Why do I deserve to be the victim of his crime? ____
I wake to the sunlight, To find you beside me. Nothing is more beautiful than you, Because you are all I see. I want to be there as you awaken. I want to help you calm down when you feel shaken.
I will always be here To hold your hand To wipe your tears To dance with you To hold you near To sing with you To get rid of your fears.
I love you. With every cell in me. I know you do too. You have my heart and the key. _____
As the sun sets it is a picture perfect moment, I grab my camera to preserve it forever. But I was a moment too late, And you couldn't see the brilliance. I will try again on a later date.
The star shines alone, The light is blinding. But beautiful. Then I noticed the others around it. All just as amazing, Yet they shine on their own. Together, but seperate. Breathtaking. ____
I wake to the dawn. The early morning sun, Is rising to greet me. Fills me with energy, As I wonder what I will see.
I step out into the sunlight, Looking upon all the beautiful colors of nature. The green on the leaves and the green ground. A lavender flower petal falls without making a sound.
I walk with a purpose. Throught my day. The light, bouncy, air around me, Begs for me to play.
So I skip through the yellow fields of wheat. I climb up the old, faithful tree. This day is such a wonderful treat. It is amazing just to be.
When the day begins to darken, I begin to feel tired. So I walk back to my home, And dream of the beauty of nature. I am ready for a new dawn.
The tear of our sorrows, Is all that we will give. No matter how many curses and plagues, That we try to outlive.
So much death, So much sorrow. What is the point, Of looking foward to tomorrow?
We can't let you in, Or you might be able to see. How much pain there is, Or all of the suffering.
So let it be known, That we are still strong. Even though it is false, Even though it is wrong.
So only a small tear, Will drop from our faces. Only a small rip, Tears the courage where our faith is. ____
Every day I live I try to survive. But this one I wasn't so lucky. Because I forgot to switch the car to "Drive". ___
Successful Resurrection Has just now occurred. No apparent infection Is your vision at all blurred?
Even though you aren't perfection, I'll put you with the successful collection. You name is Resur S. The Third SURPRISE! You are half bird!
Now I will throw you into a crate Where for one whole year you get to wait Then I will take you out again And that is when the tests will begin!
Don't you worry, we will keep you fed. Pick one for now, Water or bread? Now just sit there and watch the rest die. Why, do you ask? Because they can't fly.
Lets hope you can in a year or so. Because if not, then into the trash you'll go! It isn't evil, but it isn't great. Now sit down and contemplate your fate.
Red dawn on the horizon Blood on my hands I didn't mean to kill him. This wasn't my plan. ___
Invisible amid the crowd, As the sound of blood Hits the ground.
Lays him gently there to die, Wipes off his blade While the man cries.
Watching his eyes Turn a lifeless blue. He gets up to leave and bids him adieu ___
How can this be repaired? When no one is waiting, When nothing is there.
What am I supposed to do? When there are no directions, No map to turn to.
How can we fix this? If you choose to be ignorant, Just to have your bliss.
I'm ready to confront you. I'm ready to confess. But I can't find the words to. So this emotion I will suppress. ___
The cat purrs The dog sits The fish swims And Moon is pissed. ___
I had a talk with the man on the moon, I asked him if his head felt any better. He replied no, then gave me some cheese, And a very nice, cozy, and warm sweater. ___
The wolf laughs with unrestrained glee, as he pounces on his prey, killing it instantly. Biting into the flesh of the deer, He rears his head back, And howls with a sneer. Now he runs through the length of the forest, And he runs into a small field. Where he finds a very small girl, Oh, what a deal! The girl walks up to him, And he looks back with a glare. She reaches out to touch him, And his nostrils flare. Another human enters the field, He becomes very tense, The human screams and runs away, Now this doesn't make sense. Why did the human leave the girl? Why didn't she follow the man? It seems the girl has nowhere to go. Now the wolf starts to make a plan. He'll keep the girl, Since the man, she didn't follow. He'll raise her in his new pack of two, Now his heart won't be so hollow. So he walks back to the forest, And the little girl is right beside him. He walks into a large cave, Where the humans won't be able to find them. The wolf raises the girl as his own, And the girl begins to learn. She knows every part of the forest, Every tree, every path, every fern. She grows older and so does he. Now the girl goes out alone. He is not there to notice that, Humans now know about his home. One day the girl leaves, And she never comes back. The wolf now has to live alone Now love ,again, he lacks.
Plastic dolls become real Not just a figment of my mind Floating serenely through the winds Aimlessly they shift through reality They are silent through the din They exist only through brevity Though they seek only in Vague words: the temperament of bondage Whether trapped, or given a place for safety, or a lifeline or out of rage They do not know.
Their new frame is a gift, and they are glad. Do they want boundaries? Or do they want freedom? Now, they look truly sad, tired, weary of this flying. If only they could rest. ___
The whispers of the ocean, Calm my fiery mind. Anger at the world, Is lost in its soft tides. Throw yourself, Into this world of peace. Refreshment from the rest of the Earth, To say in the least. Swim through the soft waves, And relax as you float. You are on your own, Using yourself as your boat. Let the ocean guide you, Let it take you away. It will keep you from the land, It will keep your rage at bay. ____
These headphones on my head, Keep out the rest of the world, Till everyone else thinks I'm dead.
I keep them in all day, So I don't have to hear, All the things that they say. It is simply better this way.
It's just me and my music. My wall of music. It keeps me alive, It is my heartbeat. I can't live without it, It is what keeps me on my feet.
I can face any day, With these headphones on my head. There is nothing to worry about, Nothing to fill me with dread.
Maybe someday I can face the world, Without my music in my ears. But I'm fine for now, I am just living in fear. ___
The heater is broken, And I'm frozen, Through and through. The thing won't turn back on. What am I to do? It's too cold for the sun to warm me up, And there aren't any more blankets. I'll go out and buy me a Snuggie! Yes, that is what I'll do! I'll get me a Snuggie. Maybe even two. I might even get three, so I can share. With you, and me. Wait, Maybe four! So I can share with more! One for IcyIndia, One for me. One for the lovely Parsat, And one for the rest of the Community!
Dried leaves on the ground, Crumpled and torn Before long there is nothing left. Nothing left to for us to mourn. Not a shred of evidence, That it was ever there. New leaves die to be replaced, More retire with the cold autumn air. ___
What did I just do? To make you hate me? Something just happened, How is it I can not see?
I'm sitting here In the dark room. All alone, With nothing to do.
I'm still lost, As to what I didn't do. You never told me, You left me with no clue.
You'll come back to me, I'll wait for you. Because you told me, That if I wasn't there you wouldn't know what to do.
I'll just sit here in this room And wait. I just hope It isn't too late. ___
So many ninjas Too many hits. So many poems This one will blow yours to bits.
No one better post another After I post this one. Cause If you do, I will assure you, It is your throat I will slit. ___
I've searched forever To find the one Everyone told me It could not be done.
It seems they were right, Cause I never found you. I just wish I had something to fall back to.
I don't know what I should do After spending a lifetime Of searching for you
But you were never really there Were you? I was just on some wild goose chase That in the end left me blue. _____
What time is it? Page 60, OH SNAP. That means time for a new Digest. And all my poetry is crap. ___
The flag in the wind, Tossed about Abused by the air But shines for all to see. To say, We were here first! Or This is my castle! Pride is what keeps it flying. Not the wind. Even when it is folded on a coffin, Pride, is the message it sends.
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On a journey to hide, back from the land we lived inside. Keep running, and don't turn back. If they spot your face, they will shoot and that's a fact. Don't drop what you are holding, and if you do leave it there. The thought of losing you to them, is something I don't think I can bear. We are leaving so you can live, a free and full life. Don't worry Son, by the end of this journey I'm sure it will be the end of my strife. Carry on, Carry on, Don't let me slow you down. Make a good life with the freedom that is to soon be found. Keep going, make sure to keep your head low. If they have spies in the trees, It is something I don't know. We made it to the edges, now run and don't stop. I'll catch up in a bit, But I can't promise I won't get caught. ____
Going in the wrong way Looking for another way out Can't find the back door It's useless to scream or shout.
Deserted and desolate, Barren and cold Why does that voice scream at me? So defiant, and bold?
Guiding me through the paths Like and invisble hand Showing me how To cross this foreign land. ____
A delusional mind Is quite dangerous indeed. Always tricking your head As how to fufill its need. Terrifying illusions Believeable confusions They always seem so real, But deep inside, You know you can't win in a devils deal. ____
Slicing through my skin Like cheese Nobody in mind That I aim to please.
Just a release Of my inner pain Just making it real A twisted sort of a physical gain.
You say selfish, I say no. You say stupid, I let go.
Of the emotions Stirring inside me Why can't the world Just let this be? The one thing I find To set them free Without having to harm Everyone around me.
Just leave it alone So I can figure This out on my own. I don't need you Every step of the way I do this for everyone To keep them at bay. ___
My soul, coated in rime, Cold to the touch, Frozen in time.
Keeps me on edge, and bold. But how long can I stay this cold?
It pains me to see That I can never be Truly happy, ever again. Can't feel joy with my soul Because it froze a long time ago ___
A fiery bolt of electricity, Just killed my Direct TV. No more Cartoon Network. Or Spongebob galore, I just get to sit down And be completely bored. Now I have no excuse, To not do my work. No more homework, I'm allowed to shirk. Shooting me now, Would be a gracious present. Just do it quick, And take me out of this torment. I will miss you Direct TV Darn that bolt Of fiery electricy...
Stallions bound across the lawn Omg I just ate a prawn Look at that, a little fawn I think we all know a guy named Sean. ___
Bold was he That climbed the tree Marked by death Steals your breath But he is bold, With wisdom of old. Are his actions blind? What is he to find? Does he know That it is hopeless to go? For he will never return There is nothing to learn. What does he know That would make him go? ___
Resurrecting the first line song It is harder than it seems I've nothing to rhyme with song, Oh wait! A bong. We're making a song? I'll use the bong. Making a song With a bong I keep going on With this bong song The song is getting long.. I'll just stop the song. ~break for bong~ Now is the end of the first line song! _____
The poor dog on the road Lying on its side Should've seen that car coming Such a horrible way to die. ___
Unicorns are magical Leprechauns are too. I'll use my awesome magic To revive this thread, and make a rose turn blue. ___
Clouds and puffs of air Meandering through the sky Making crazy pictures To be transformed by our eyes. Giving rain an shade All around the Earth Then away they slowly fade To come back in a constant rebirth.
He's Climbing In Your Windows Snatchin' yo' pets up Tryin to sell em so you need to Hide yo' cats Hide yo' dogs Hide yo' fish Hide yo' birds! And whatever other kinda pet you have. ____
Cavemen are hunting dinosaurs, Absurd is the thought That they had a chance To take one down With such a small stance. Their pitiful sticks Couldn't compete With skin so thick. Try as they might None went down Came home every night Nothing was found. ___
Where is the child that I once was? Innocent and ignorant At peace with the blindness I miss the old me Where Mom and Dad would always take care And I never had to worry. Where is that child what I once was? Where I never had to question What someone does Where did I go? Why in the world Did I ever want to know? ____
